Hi all,
Just joined today and want to get back into playing original music again.
Here is a song I wrote and recorded on garage band awhile ago.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zkQiotWccWg
Be great to know what you think.
I'd love to find a songwriter to work with in the Sunday Songwriters Group.
I've been trying to write a song for this weeks assignment, but I'm struggling.
If words are your thing and your interested let me know.
Wow this is very nice.
Beautiful background . . . really like the sound of the amp (setting) . . .
Pleasant melody . . . cool percussive echoing effect.
Really well done . . . no, I mean . . . really well done.
I copied the lyrics from your YouTube post . . . in case anybody else wants to see them.
In the darkness colours swirl
breaking banks flood my world
Dreams of grey and vivid nights.
I cannot sleep till the colours right.
Watch as I drift in and out
following you big grey cloud
pray you all give me more
than 4 water colours.
Sunburn cracks another day
curse the devil who holds the rain
dying now in the month of may
I cannot sleep till the colours right
Watch as I drift in and out
following you big grey cloud
pray you all give me more
than 4 water colours.
It's the rock that gives the stream its music . . . and the stream that gives the rock its roll.
Hi Dan,
Ken was kind enough to give me a link to find where you posted. I am glad he did. :D I enjoyed the song a lot.
Consider reposting this in the Sunday Songrwriter's Group and include the topic line as to which week this was for.
The music is great....the lyrics are a bit to encrypted for me to follow except to say the singer is unhappy....but a lot of people go for encrypted lyrics so it might work depending on what you are looking to accomplish.
Welcome to SSG! :D
James
Thanks KR2 and James for your kind comments :D
You right about the lyrics James they don't mean alot.
I never spend much time on the words I always rush through to get it finished.
Great job Dan. :)
Like James, I enjoyed the music very much. The lyrics only look a few tweaks away from being fine. It's not always necessary to have detailed stories if the words are more abstract but still manage to create the right mood. Leaving a touch of mystery is no bad thing. I would have liked to have been able to hear them a bit more clearly, but given how it was recorded that's easily fixed next time around.
Hope to see you having crack at the SSG - where you're sure to get plenty of suggestions about shaping up songs. The good thing about the comments at the SSG is that they're are all designed to give helpful ideas and there's no pressure to accept them all if you don't feel they fit.
Cheers,
Chris
