This is a song i wrote a while ago, i just found it while going through my computer.. this i would say is about 6-8 years old, i wrote this back around Christmas of 98 i believe. I haven't titled it but one would assume its "I'll be the one" but feel free to add/remove or rename it. Thanks
I'll be the one who sings you to sleep
I'll be the one who catches you when you leap
I'll be the one who holds your hand
And walks you home
I'll be your eyes when you go blind
I'll be the one who pulls when your in a bind
I'll be the one who gives you a heart
When your's stops beating
And when i look in your eyes
I feel like it'll be fine
I'm so glad that you are mine
Your an angel sent from the sky
Now i sit on the edge of my dream
And i'm waiting patiently
As my heart begins to steam
I'll continue waiting
I'll be the one to grant your wish
I'll be the one to give eternal bliss
I'll be the one who holds you tight
When we are kissing
I'll be the one who takes you home
I'll be the one who calls you on the phone
I'll be the one who talks for hours
And buys you flowers
And when i look in your eyes
I feel like it'll be fine
I'm so glad that you are mine
Your an angel sent from the sky
Now i sit on the edge of my dream
And i'm waiting patiently
As my heart begins to steam
it's cool. the repetition works well and it's kind of touching in a way. but it's a little wierd in that it sounds like one of those sunday school "message from god" sort of things... and it's strange that you're the one who's going to do all this, yet the other person's the angel.
also, it's you're, not your. you're is short for you are. you're a tall man. your is possesive. that's your bike.
I think your assumption of the title is correct, 'I'll Be The One', I can't see what else it could be.
In the second verse it would be good to carry the repetition:
I'll be your eyes when you go blind
I'll be the one who pulls when your in a bind
I'll be the one who gives you a heart
When your's stops beating
You could attempt to use 'I'll be your eyes' throughout this verse or stick to 'I'll be the one'. You obviously will have to change the other words in the verse to fit.
Cheers.
Kinda reminds me of REMs 'Be Mine' but nice lyrics nevertheless.
Hey I like the lyrics, Keep it up!!!
