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(@pitney2000)
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another internet love song

Whittled Away
By Joyce Whorton © 1999

V1
How can I do this Tell me the way

When day after day I am whittled away

Hearts are so fickle, Don't do what they say

Have a life of their own

And I've been whittled away

CHORUS

Gone is the smile I wore for you

Here in my heart there's an aching that's true

You used the blade with precession and grace

And with it you whittled my heart away

V2
I thought we made an incredible team

We started building a doable dream

But dreams fade away with the light of the day

And this loss had whittled my heart away

Chorus

Gone is the smile I wore for you

Here in my heart there's an aching that's true

You used the blade with precession and grace

And with it you whittled my heart away

V3
Maybe someday we will try this again

I never wanted our dream to end

But each time I open a letter today

Apiece of my heart just gets

Whittled away… fade to end

ill have the mp3 at soundclicks soon but id love your reaction to this piece

thanks joyce


   
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(@todds)
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Joyce,

I think this is really solid. It flows really well and I can't think of anything I would change. I immediately heard a traditional country melody in my head -- maybe something you'd hear in the 30's or 40's. Hope that doesn't offend, because some people have a strong hatred of country. Let us know when you've got an mp3 for it.


   
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(@val)
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'You used the blade with precision and grace
And with it you whittled my heart away'

These are great lines for a song. I agree with todds - traditional country.
It will be interesting to hear the end result.


   
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(@guitargeek)
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i enjoyed reading this too, it flows very nicely and the lyrics are good too!


   
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(@musicmaniac221)
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wow...the way this flows...its amazing...great song!

Do what you love, love what you do
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(@pitney2000)
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i just today made my soundclicks account and posted the mp3 there it will be up sometime tomorrow they have a 24hr period to scan new pages and content ... its not really country ...maybe a bit more an R&B feel i dont know you guys can decide when you hear it thx again

Joyce


   
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(@pitney2000)
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well that was fast .... the song is ready guys ... enjoy let me know what you think.... i am always open to suggestions

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/pitney2000music.htm

im really excited to have your comments

Joyce


   
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(@musicmaniac221)
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lalala, im 14 and i really only listen to rock...but this...this sounded really good...just seemd to flow well...nice.+

Do what you love, love what you do
http://www.acidplanet.com
-Nick


   
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