another internet love song
Whittled Away
By Joyce Whorton © 1999
V1
How can I do this Tell me the way
When day after day I am whittled away
Hearts are so fickle, Don't do what they say
Have a life of their own
And I've been whittled away
CHORUS
Gone is the smile I wore for you
Here in my heart there's an aching that's true
You used the blade with precession and grace
And with it you whittled my heart away
V2
I thought we made an incredible team
We started building a doable dream
But dreams fade away with the light of the day
And this loss had whittled my heart away
Chorus
Gone is the smile I wore for you
Here in my heart there's an aching that's true
You used the blade with precession and grace
And with it you whittled my heart away
V3
Maybe someday we will try this again
I never wanted our dream to end
But each time I open a letter today
Apiece of my heart just gets
Whittled away… fade to end
ill have the mp3 at soundclicks soon but id love your reaction to this piece
thanks joyce
Joyce,
I think this is really solid. It flows really well and I can't think of anything I would change. I immediately heard a traditional country melody in my head -- maybe something you'd hear in the 30's or 40's. Hope that doesn't offend, because some people have a strong hatred of country. Let us know when you've got an mp3 for it.
'You used the blade with precision and grace
And with it you whittled my heart away'
These are great lines for a song. I agree with todds - traditional country.
It will be interesting to hear the end result.
i enjoyed reading this too, it flows very nicely and the lyrics are good too!
wow...the way this flows...its amazing...great song!
Do what you love, love what you do
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-Nick
i just today made my soundclicks account and posted the mp3 there it will be up sometime tomorrow they have a 24hr period to scan new pages and content ... its not really country ...maybe a bit more an R&B feel i dont know you guys can decide when you hear it thx again
Joyce
well that was fast .... the song is ready guys ... enjoy let me know what you think.... i am always open to suggestions
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/pitney2000music.htm
im really excited to have your comments
Joyce
lalala, im 14 and i really only listen to rock...but this...this sounded really good...just seemd to flow well...nice.+
Do what you love, love what you do
http://www.acidplanet.com
-Nick
