A vase full of Crimson
Engulfed in the sea of tears
Time has its effects
To which it mirrors
The tears have stopped flowing
The crimson is now wilting
Drop after drop was wasted
From full to the top
To dry at the bottom
No more to be wasted
The petals are drying
The stem is sloping
The Crimson Petals All Fall Off
Never Showing Life Again
One Last Tear To Hit The Ground
And No One Around To Feel It
The tears have stopped flowing
The crimson is wilting
* this is so totally random its sickening *
It's 15 Till And She Has The Other 45 In Her Mouth.
hi dilly
very nice love some of lyrics espically the first verse
well done
cheers
L.K
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Aghhhh
Not only am I a senior citizen
I'm now a bloody senior member
Are you people trying to tell me I'm old or what ?
over 700 posts ( I really do need to get out more )
Very nice, in a depressing kind of way. :cry: I like it! :D It progresses nicely and the last verse is so final it hurts. :!: good work---the dog
adorable :D
really amazing and beautiful, you should be proud.
I'd love to hear it, if you record it.
very well done;)
bluenightangel
"oh, eventually it will break your heart" - anders wendin
Hi Dilly
Not a bad start and a good use of imagery. The song progresses well and finishes strongly. I would make a few minor word changes if it was me: :)
A vase full of Crimson
Engulfed in a sea of tears
Time has its effects
Which it mirrors
The tears have stopped flowing
The crimson is now wilting
Drop after drop is wasted
Full to the top
To dry at the bottom
No more tears are wasted
The petals are drying
The stem is drooping (or bending) (couldn't quite decide which fitted best here)
The Crimson Petals Fall Off
Never To Show Life Again
One Last Tear Hits The Ground
And No One's Around To Feel It
The tears have stopped flowing
The crimson is wilting away
Good stuff :)
You are what you eat, eat well
Wow thanks, I really wasn't expecting any reviews just because it's... eh I still have to think of a word for it :shock:
It's 15 Till And She Has The Other 45 In Her Mouth.
