I feel kinda icky about taking a Dr. Suess book title and writing a song about drugs. Let me know what you think! P.S. This is not personal experience.
"Oh, the places you'll go!"
V1
Laying here on the floor
Another hit will settle the score
Entering a world of oblivion
In my eyes, doesn't seem like a sin
V2
The feel of carpet against my skin
And the walls around begin to spin
Reality floating far away
No one can hear a word I say
CHORUS
Stick it deep inside your vein
Soon you can ignore the pain
Life around you will fade away
Problems saved for another day
It will soon consume your life
The cause of all your pain and strife
But Oh, the places you'll go
Up so high while down so low
V3
Life around me seems to stop
Time to take another drop
Losing control of my despair
While running my fingers through my hair
V4
I try to stand up on my feet
My body falls in one big heap
But there's no pain and I don't care
It's not like I am fully aware
CHORUS
V5
The feelings start to disappear
Reality takes the wheel to steer
Soberness smacks me in the face
It all just seems to be a waste
V6
I'll now pretend to be alive
That I don't need it to survive
Looking to find myself some more
Get another hit so I can soar
CHORUS
Okay, I really like it! I think it flows well and your rhymes are great. Isn't the one of the joys of writing letting your imagination run wild? That's what you've done and you have painted the picture perfectly. I really like how you take us through the initial hit to the soberness smacking you in the face, the feelings of despair. Great writing.
Watch out Dr. Suess!! ;)
if i wrote this.. the chorus would be
tie my shoestrings around my arm
my works work well with no alarms
life around you will fade away
but nothing stays, now do they?
why must drugs always be bad? anyways.. i figured if you actually did write this on drugs it would be alot more suessadonian. hahaha.. i don't know what that means..
anyways. i'm no good at critics or spelling. good job!
