Okay, I really like it! I think it flows well and your rhymes are great. Isn't the one of the joys of writing letting your imagination run wild? Th...

Thanks Scratch & Ja'mir! I appreciate your input. I am working on some melodies for some of my lyrics, but that's proving to be a slow process. ...

David & Rob -- Thanks so much for your help and compliments!! I really like the redraft, especially when I compare the two. I'm still very open ...

Thanks for the suggestions. I wrote another verse and tried to do what you requested. It's not as good as the first verse though. Is this the direc...

LOVE IT! Always a pleasure to read your stuff. I'm new to the boards, but I find your work very inspiring!!

Thanks so much for your suggestions. I will work them all. I really like the edited verses you wrote. Thanks a million!!Jen