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(@jamestoffee)
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SSG11-Week1 It's Sunday Somewhere

Jamaican Vocal Attempt
http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=11980660

Vocal Version 2
http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=11984026

===========Revised Version=======================
Monday corporate suits and long commutes
Tuesday hard news and legal disputes
Wednesday endless lists of things to do
I’ll light up another Sunday mood

Thursday unglued from office feuds
Friday’s a zoo of ineptitude
Saturday’s puke on my dancing shoes
I’ll just smoke another Sunday mood

Chorus
It’s Sunday somewhere
It’s Sunday somewhere
I’m not waiting ‘til Sunday’s here
It’s Sunday somewhere

Monday woke up from suspended animation
Tuesday a target of telecommunication
Wednesday subjected to behavior modification
I’ll light up another Sunday sensation

Thursday a victim of reverse discrimination
Friday accused of oversimplification
Saturday questions of sexual orientation
I’ll just smoke another Sunday sensation

chorus

===========Original Version=======================
Monday corporate suits and long commutes
Tuesday hard news and legal disputes
Wednesday endless lists of things to do
I’ll light up another Sunday mood

Chorus
It’s Sunday somewhere
It’s Sunday somewhere
I’m not waiting ‘til Sunday’s here
It’s Sunday somewhere

Thursday unglued from office feuds
Friday’s a zoo of ineptitude
Saturday’s puke on my dancing shoes
I’ll just smoke another Sunday mood

chorus

Monday woke up from suspended animation
Tuesday a target of telecommunication
Wednesday subjected to behavior modification
I’ll light up another Sunday sensation

chorus

Thursday a victim of reverse discrimination
Friday accused of oversimplification
Saturday questions of sexual orientation
I’ll just smoke another Sunday sensation

chorus


   
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(@andygetch)
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Hi James,
Its Sunday! I like the reggae groove and interesting twist on the vocals, but the vocal seemed a bit forced and :roll: was getting old by the second week. Maybe if you sang the verses in something closer to your typical voice. I also got lost between the end of first week Saturday puke and the second week surrealism (which I liked better than the corporate verses) Monday suspended animation. Something seems to have happened that is significant to the story. Incarceration? Death? Sleep/dream? I am left wondering. Did you consider another verse or bridge for the transition? As always just my observation after one listen and read. Use what helps, toss the rest. :D

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(@jamestoffee)
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Hi Andy,
the vocal seemed a bit forced and :roll: was getting old by the second week.
Chalk it up to experimenting and stretching :wink: ....maybe being white, too :roll: :lol:
I also got lost between the end of first week Saturday puke and the second week
The idea was to point out all the problems the rest of the week and needing a "Sunday break".....but verse 3 and 4 have a bit more of a paranoid feel due to the exposure of the "Sunday sensation"
http://healthland.time.com/2011/04/06/why-pot-smokers-are-paranoid/
Did you consider another verse or bridge for the transition?
I was getting a bit long....I was thinking more of cutting back then adding, but the song might be in need of more revisions for clarification's sake.

Thanks for the listen and feedback :D

James


   
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*POOF*I took out some choruses so the song wouldn't drag :mrgreen:


   
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(@andygetch)
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*POOF*I took out some choruses so the song wouldn't drag :mrgreen:
I like that better :D

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(@jamestoffee)
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I like that better :D
Thanks for the 2nd listen and additional feeback :D


   
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(@john-sargent)
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I like the reggae and the lyric but yting to take on a Jamaican accent just doesn't sit right.


   
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(@jamestoffee)
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yting to take on a Jamaican accent just doesn't sit right.
Ok....noted :roll:....no time tonight for any changes, but see how the week rolls out.

Thanks for the listen and feedback :wink:


   
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Hi James

Glad I listened first before reading the comments. No problems with the accent but I think you may find that singing it in your "natural" voice may bring more of an authentic voice to the song. Not in terms of the genre but in terms of you as narrator.

Definitely think condensing the week made the whole song stronger as well. Nice work!

Looking forward to more.

Peace


   
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James,

Not much to add. The vocals do remind me of Peter Tosh
and that's a good thing.

John

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Thanks David and John for the feedback.

Here is a more "natural voice" version :D
Vocal Version 2
http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=11984026


   
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Hi again, James

I like them both but I'm definitely leaning towards the "natural voice" version.

Of course, I'm also wishing my voice could be anywhere near that expressive.

Peace


   
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David,

Thanks for the follow-up listen and post :D

James


   
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It isn't always Sunday somewhere though - It's a silly and ridiculous song. Right up my ally. I thought the first version kept with the ridiculuousnessesititude and the latter versions lost it. I thought the first version was damn near complete - If it were mine I'd flip the verses and try it that way. I tend to sing a song in the order i write it but find I like it more when I change it up. Where is the slow guitar solo with the heavy phaser on it? Its fun and interesting. Good tune.


   
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It isn't always Sunday somewhere though - It's a silly and ridiculous song.
Yes, you have to sustain reality a while to get into the tall tale :wink:
I thought the first version kept with the ridiculuousnessesititude and the latter versions lost it.
Thanks for the balance of consensus.
Where is the slow guitar solo with the heavy phaser on it?
Yes, the production could use a lot more.
If it were mine I'd flip the verses and try it that way.
I try to play around with that as well. I see a flaw in this song where the second half doesn't really move the situation forward; it just repeats the ideas in a different form of "problems"

Thanks for the listen and post. :D At least the gist if it is there if I want to go back and rework it, but at this point, I'll probably move on to other songs.


   
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