Hiya.. its been quite a while since I last posted, heres my week 14.
1st Draft..
uptempo beat.
1st verse
She Said..
What do you do..
When find out your lover is
Cheating on you..
She Wept..
It cant be true..
You never think this is gonna
Happen to you..
2nd verse
She Said..
I feel used..
How could anybody be so cruel
She Cryed..
Im so confused..
Her heart was broken
Battered and bruised
Chorus
She was a blue sky, with yellow sunshine.
Not a cloud in sight...
But the rain's set in forever
Changed her days into nights..
3rd verse
She Said..
Who can I turn too..
Will anyone understand..
She Sobbed..
Nothing hurts more
Than the pain from a lovers hand..
Chorus
She was a blue sky, with yellow sunshine.
Not a cloud in sight...
But now the rain's set in forever
Changed her days into nights..
cheers :)
If Practice makes perfect & nobody is perfect.. Why practice?
Wow! I really like this. I would be interested to know what style you imagine it in though. I personally imagine it in an Aerosmith upbeat style, but of course each to our own!
I think the structure is very good, and the chorus is extremely creative.
Nice job ;)
Awesome words Heelsey. Been a while since I've read your work. I like it, I like it a lot. ;D
