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(@Anonymous)
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Hmmm...  I was thinking kind of folksy.

Amber Days of Autumn

In the amber days of autumn,
as the leaves are turning brittle,
I go walking through the town we shared,
and I'm sad - but just a little,
I recall how much you loved me
during that far away September,
and I know it's gone forever now,
except when I remember...

and I do....

I remember how your golden hair
would catch the sun and hold it there
just long enough for me to stare
and wonder if I even dare
to reach out for the beauty bared
to all the world without a care
as if completely unaware
you had my heart ensnared

The air is turning cooler
in the amber days of fall
and I know I shouldn't visit
and I know I shouldn't call
'cause you're happy with another
and that's as it ought to be
but sometimes I can't help wonderin'
if it could've been with me

yes I do....

I remember how your dark brown eyes
would light up just like fireflies
when in the field we'd go and lie
and watch the stars glimmer high
embedded in a cobolt sky
and silently I'd wonder why
the fates had favored such as I
you asked me why I sighed

During the amber days of autumn
the daylight passes quickly
I drink melancholy reverie
like some men swallow whiskey
and I'm happy you've moved on
I know our love couldn't last
but I keep one foot in the present
and the other in the past

yes I do....

I remember how your golden hair
can catch the sun and hold it there
just long enough for me to stare
and wonder if I even dare
to reach out for the beauty bared
to all world without a care
as if completely unaware
you keep my heart ensnared


   
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(@Anonymous)
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Sweet. Flows quite well and thelong  rhyming bits are admirable. I've always had a thing for that sorta... thing.

And very folksy

-Marv


   
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(@jamir)
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Hi'a Scratchmonkey,
I love the story, it flows really well, I reckon it would have to be folk as it is rather lengthy, and i must agree with MO, your rhyming is really good,especially the brittle and little, very clever.see,  i am a rhymimg sucker as well.

go well
Ja'mir

I am a cloud within a cloud http://www.justjamir.com

you can hear my songs at :

http://www.mp3.com.au/artist.asp?id=21709


   
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(@Anonymous)
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Greetings Jamir & Marv,

Thanks for the kind words.  Very encouraging.  


   
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