That Old Photograph - Now with MP3 - Wk 2

Wow Vic - I have my guitar in my hand now just loving this song!

Wow indeed.

I don't have a guitar in my hand, but it's still absolutely brilliant.

Great, great work.

Nice work Vic!
Theres one part I had a problem with..

They had their dreams and fantasies,
Whatever happened to that boy and girl,
They had the stars, they fell to earth,
They finally touched the real world....

There 2nd line was a bit of a mouth full for me, but it could be just the way im singing it...

Are you going to be recording it?

I'd like to second(third) the things said before. wow:)
first read-through I loved verse one, first sing-and-play-through( :wink: ) I absolutely fell in love with verse#3, wow. didn't seem to be so good just reading it but singing, man, this is beautiful, above all its last line.

all in all great song, I write my name on the list of those who want to hear that if you rcord it;)
bluenightangel

8) 8) Hey Vic, this is really great :!: :D and a nice chord progression also :!: Hope we get to hear it soon. :D :D the dog

hey vic,

i like this song. the picture that i get in my head is that the photo is maybe like an anne geddes(sp?) the photos of the little kids dressed up in adult clothes, black and white photos with a little hadn coloring done. of the two kids one dressed as a rock star and the other dressed as the model.

sweet sentiment, the looking back at a photo and the lament of what never came to be.

good job.

-CheapThrill

Hey Vic,

Outstanding, mate! Reminds me of Dan Fogelberg's "Another Auld Lang Syne"
Just tried out your chord progression -- VERY cool!

If I may just pick at one very tiny thing, as Heelsy mentioned, the last verse didn't quite do it for me. But for different reasons.
They had their dreams and fantasies,
Whatever happened to that boy and girl,
They had the stars, they fell to earth,
They finally touched the real world....
The last line doesn't seem to carry the same ambience, panache, je ne se qua as the rest of the song. It's probably just me, though. I dated a gal whose father always used the phrase "real world" to describe anything negative. I always thought to myself "the 'real world' has plenty of cool stuff too." (like his daughter) Who, come to think of it, ended up being rather negative herself. Wow, I'm getting real tangential here. So like I said, it's probably just me. Everything else about the song is just fantastic. Love it.

-- Scratch 8)

Hi'a Vic,
Don't throw the photo away..... sorry I was saying this to myself as I was reading the lines so decided it was worthy to put in. This is really beautiful and very much my cup of tea !!!!!! Thank you

Go well
Ja'mir

Hi Vic

Had to try this out on my guitar. Absolutely love it - really feel for the guy. Last line of the chorus works astonishingy well with that progression.

Excellent stuff

Bob

Thanks for all your kind words .... praise may not be as readily forthcoming when you hear my (for want of a better description) vocals...

:) :) :)

Vic.

Hey ya, mate!

great you managed to record and post it:)
just listened to it and, man, the music's beautiful. wish I could play the guitar as well. love the sweet pattern you play in verse3.
the song turned out differently from what I imagined it to be like but it's amazing. why did you change 'hollow' to 'empty'? did it fit better? I like 'hollow'. but that's nit-picky.

guess what, your vocals aren't soo bad, in fact they reminded me of Alice in Chains unplugged......especially the choruses, for example the first line of the second chorus. like that very much.

thanks for posting, enjoyed listening to it :D
very well done.
bluenightangel

Thanks BNA....d'you know, I hadn't even realised I'd changed "hollow" to "empty" until you pointed it out....it was originally "empty" in the first rough draft, but after I'd changed a few things about it beacme "hollow" - until I came to record it, was "singing" and playing at same time so concentrating really hard.....

I might re-record this and keep the pattern you mentioned for all three verses...fingerpicked....and just strum the choruses....this is the first and only (honest!!!) take I've done so far....

What d'you think?

:) :) :)

Vic

Hey Vic,

you also changed "sometimes" to "Making me" in vs. 2. Things are different when you record than when you write. But the sung lyrics work as well as the written ones.

Honestly, this is really terrific. Quite different than I imagined it, but that's always going to be the case, I think. Anyways, I loved it. really great work. I think your idea to fingerpick the verses and strum the chorus would work wonderfully.

-- Scratch 8)

hi:)

I know it's very difficult to play and sing at the same time and then do it in a way the recorded song will neither have too loud nor too sileet guitar/singing .... ;)
and then you shall pay attention to what you're actually singing? jesus:)
no, it's okay, as scratch said either option works well.

I also think your idea of fingerpicking all the verses would work nicely. would make the song a bit more melancholy..(?) on the other hand there is something about strumming the verses and only do the last one fingerpicked, kinda shows its vulnerability (?)
I'm not good at deciding, glad I won't have to do it cause it's your song :lol:

so do what you like and I'll like it, too.
would be interesting to hear the fingerpicked version, though;)
bluenightangel