Here's one with a kind of Aimee Mann feel to it.
Got it bad
Verse:
So you're living like you said you'd never live again
Looks like you found a way to compromise
Seems that you've gone and burned another bridge again
Well who am I to criticize, still you know you've got to realize
'Chorus:
That you had it good
Now you got it bad
And when you get it right
You miss the life you had
Verse:
Ever since I met you you were moving to another place
Well everybody wants to be someone else some of the time
If you're so unhappy with your current space
Well all you've got to do is turn around and picture yourself with another face
Chorus
Cause you had it good
Now you got it bad
And you wonder why
It's not the life you had
Bridge:
Sometimes, if you'll just stop and think about it
You'wonder if you ever really had it made
Sometimes you just got to live without it
I can't explain, it's not the same
Hi Spam
Good flow and good feel to this one. I'm not that aware of Aimee Mann so can't really say if it sounds like someting she'd do.
A couple of points - your verses contain some really long lines which I struggled with. I'd have a look at them again and see if you can't shorten them. Also your rhyme scheme in V1 is ABAB whereas in V2 it's ABAA which doesn't work as well. Some suggestions below
V1
So you're living like you said you'd never live again
Looks like you found a way to compromise
Seems that you've gone and burned another bridge again
Who am I to talk, who am I to criticise
V2
Ever since I met you, you've been moving to another place
We all want to be someone else at times
If you're so unhappy with your current space
turn around and see yourself with someone else's eyes
I like the chorus and the bridge they stand together quite well.
Good stuff
Bob :)
You are what you eat, eat well
Thanks so much Bob!
I actually recorded this with my band at the last rehearsal on Wednesday and listening to it now, it is a bit rushed, becasue I'm singing it in a talking sort of style.
Keeping the lines limitied really does give it some more structure.
I'll try it differently next time.
Thanks!
Spam
BTW the band really enjoyed trying funky/bluesy sound for a change!
