I wasn't going to do one this week, but katreich's protest song got me riled.
Futility.
A tired crying girl.
Looses scope of the world.
Sheets twist beneath her hands,
No one understands.
Beneath heavens light,
This world is not quite right.
Unsatisfied with media's demons,
and the states hero's.
The cause has lost its shimmer
what does fear know?
The clash of teams.
Is communication so difficult?
To be known as mans apex.
Is humanity's insult.
A tired laughing girl.
Has a message for the world,
Hurls a bottle at the wall.
and yell's a wake up call.
Patrons gawk
Neighbors pound.
Indifference, denial.
No one likes the sound
of some unfriendly truth
the efforts futile,
the cause is doomed
Unsatisfied with media's demons,
and the states hero's.
The cause has lost its shimmer
what does fear know?
The clash of teams.
Is communication so difficult?
To be known as mans apex.
Is humanity's insult.
A tired bitter girl.
Gives up on the world.
She cleans the bottle off the floor,
and leaves for work.
"Like the coldest winter chill. Heaven beside you. Hell within." -Jerry Cantrell
Hi Saber!
I agree that your song has an Ani DiFranco feel to it.
Well wrote. :D
"If I had a time machine, I'd go back and tell me to practise that bloody guitar!" -Vic Lewis
Everything is 42..... again.
Hi
The only tweek I can offer is in this line
No one understands ( I might have added the word seems ..so it reads like this )
No one seems to understand
keep posting
L.k
Aghhhh
Not only am I a senior citizen
I'm now a bloody senior member
Are you people trying to tell me I'm old or what ?
over 700 posts ( I really do need to get out more )
Thanks ya'll. I don't think I've ever heard Ani De franko, but I'll take that as a compliment.
I'm not sure about music, I'll have to work on it after mothers day.
"Like the coldest winter chill. Heaven beside you. Hell within." -Jerry Cantrell
Hi Saber
Good protest - good song - lots of emotion to keep it going.
Good stuff
Bob :wink:
You are what you eat, eat well
