Across the street
They sell realities across the street
The ad speaks of a purposeful dream
Not coincidence which rules our sleep
One pays for new memories
and to me it seems you bought this shi.t-
you bought all of it
This apathy cannot be real
You must've lost touch
This cable's dead
The wire's broke
These pupils are still yours
But don't move anymore
these starving eyes printed in black-and-white
once made you cry and now they're but a lullaby
i fear you are about to slip-
you're losing it
This apathy cannot be real
You must've lost touch
This cable's dead
The wire's broke
These eyes are yours
But don't move anymore
are you too tired to see it's fake?
or too focused on the bait to wake?
i wish there was a remedy
this kind of sleep may put you at ease
but see, it's most unhealthy
[it kills me]
so... I dunno... got a lot of eyes and pupils in there... but liked the eyes both in the 'chorus' and the other thing... anyways...
hope someone likes it.
cheers,
bluenightangel
"oh, eventually it will break your heart" - anders wendin
Hi Bluenightangel!
I like your song. :D
The thing about your song is I don't really get it. Then again it could just be me.
I sort of think of a cemetery or maybe an adultbook store with "are you too tired to see it's fake?
or too focused on the bait to wake?" and how unhealthy it is. Just my guess.
"If I had a time machine, I'd go back and tell me to practise that bloody guitar!" -Vic Lewis
Everything is 42..... again.
Hi Bna
I like this especially the first verse .. One certainly does pay for memories , which reminds of a story that Hilch tells about his up bringing ..
He tells a story where he was so poor when growing up ... he could not afford memories ... It's a very funny story ...
I also like the way you end this song ...
I will be around here again .. So keep posting girl
all the best
L.K
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Hey blue,
Nice work here, as always. My take on this is that it's about TV and the culture of consumerism. If so, using the terms usually related to TV to describe what's wrong with the viewer is brilliant.
I wasn't so fond of the "it's most unhealthy" line until I read the "[it kills me]" line immediately following. The two together are somehow quite effective.
Well structured too.
Wish I had more criticism.
Ice cream is a dish best served cold.
Hi Blue
Good interpretation of the assignment taking the waking up as a metaphor. Powerful sentiment behind the song which comes through very well indeed.
Good writing
bob :wink:
You are what you eat, eat well
oh good! glad you like it :D
ghost, I'm happy you like what you read and your ideas for the meaning are interesting, but I was certainly not thinking of an adultbook store :shock: ... but hey... if it works.. :wink:
SlowPlay is much closer to what I had in mind..
I think something else that influenced me here was the topic I chose from the five different tasks given for my "Abitur" (approx. A-level) in German.. to my surprise they had an quotation of Adam Green (he's just too hilarious and creative) about how important lies are and that the truth won't sing you half as beautiful lullabies ( he didn't use these excact words though).
I'm so relieved you think it's good- and even Bob said so :D
and it's very nice to see you around again, lotto king.
thanks everyone.
cheers,
bluenightangel
"oh, eventually it will break your heart" - anders wendin
