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Week 29: Dear

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(@saber)
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I was listening to Bowie when I wrote this.

Dear

Eaten by life
and the scriptures demand
It's hard to stand
but you
noble and unscathed
were saved
by the rush and pull of time
thrown into a land
that I can't seem to find.

and I waive my right to care
but I'll stick around
It's the best I can dare
cause' I'm afraid of this town

I see you baited
by memories
of an old house
and children at ease
of laughter
and a vision of me
but I'm battered
I'm tired
and I can hardly stand
you want someone familiar
but that's not who I am

and I waive my right to care
but I'll stick around
It's the best I can dare
cause' I'm afraid of this town

Perhaps a shift
in immeasurable fate
will one day take
the burden
the soreness and fear
and steer
this restless mind
into a moment
of ease

Dear
we can only see

©Joshua Aldridge 2006

"Like the coldest winter chill. Heaven beside you. Hell within." -Jerry Cantrell


   
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(@barnabus-rox)
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Hi there

Yeah I agree with B'pig (Pete) it is a really nice song ..

Pete - gee that was a nice little pick up on the waver ...

I skimmed straight past it :lol: :lol:

You must be A Captain by now :lol: :lol: :lol: (jk)

Hilch :?:

Here is to you as good as you are
And here is to me as bad as I am
As good as you are and as bad as I am
I'm as good as you are as bad as I am


   
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(@saber)
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Yeah, you're right. I'll change it.

And thanks for the comments!!!

"Like the coldest winter chill. Heaven beside you. Hell within." -Jerry Cantrell


   
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 Bob
(@bob)
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Hi Saber

Good piece - I can see the Bowie influence. Good imagery throughout which helps get the song across.

Good stuff

Bob :wink:

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You are what you eat, eat well


   
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