Wonder who’s wonderful now?
Since that’s what you called me on the night we met
Hanging on my every word,
You said that I was someone that you’d never forget
You got all my jokes and knew every song
With your sweet face how could I go wrong?
Wonder who’s beautiful now?
Since that’s what you told me when we kissed that night
Staring deeply in my eyes
You said that kissing never felt so right
I knew I was in trouble when you took my hand
And said you were a singer in a traveling band
So who is it getting the royal treatment?
What girl is getting her head turned round?
Who is it thinking that she’s gone to heaven?
Even though her feet haven’t left the ground?
Wonder who’s heartbroken now?
Waking in the morning in your room alone
Some money on the dresser
Only a text left on my phone
“See you baby, yeah it was great
Got to hit the road for the next tour date.”
And baby it was wonderful……..
KReichert
10/02/2012
Falling in love is like learning to play the guitar; first you learn to follow the rules, then you learn to play with your heart.
Hi Kathy,
Reads well and clear :D
Maybe just a simple repetition on the first lines for choruses
Example:
I Wonder
I Wonder
I Wonder
Who’s wonderful now?
I Wonder
I Wonder
I Wonder
Who’s beautiful now?
James
Hi Kathy
I'll echo James' idea about a repetition of the first line, but maybe not as a chorus but rather as a tag line to bring each verse full circle. The first verse, for example, could be like this:
Wonder who’s wonderful now?
Since that’s what you called me on the night we met
Hanging on my every word,
You said that I was someone that you’d never forget
You got all my jokes and knew every song
With your sweet face how could I go wrong?
Still I wonder who's wonderful now?
In the second verse, the last two lines seem to overstate the situation and I'm not sure you want to play into that. You can convey the same idea without the narrator feeling any forboding even though the listener will certainly be ready for it. Maybe like this:
Wonder who’s beautiful now?
Since that’s what you told me when we kissed that night
Staring deeply in my eyes
You said that kissing never felt so right
Said you poured your soul out on the stage to me
While I sat there in the second row singing harmony
Yeah I wonder who's beautiful now?
Love the bridge, by the way.
In the last verse, I'd bring back the first line, only give it to the next conquest. Also, I'd make the next road stop specific instead of a generic "next tour date" (and I only used Milwaukee because for whatever reason it immediately popped into mind. Someplace more remote (and smaller) yet somewhat recognizable as a small circuit destination would probably be better:
Wonder who’s heartbroken now?
Waking in the morning in your room alone
Some money on the dresser
Only a text left on my phone
“See you baby, yeah it was great
But we got to be in Milwaukee by eight.”
And she's wondering who's wonderful now...
Truly hoping you find time to revisit and work up some music for this. It's a great start.
Looking forward to more.
Peace
David, you always seem to have the ideas that make the most sense. Your tweaks are great. Don't be surprised if they end up in the final version.
Falling in love is like learning to play the guitar; first you learn to follow the rules, then you learn to play with your heart.
