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Week 5 - "Dear Abby"

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(@marvelousoptimist)
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Our news theme got me thinking about newspapers and the like.. and an encounter with a certain "Abby" this week furthered the inspiration for what might be the darkest thing I've ever posted here. This is complete work of fiction devised with the help of a particularly dark minded muse. I think I might come off as a bit full of my self posting a disclaimer on this one.. but really. While I didn't set out to shock or offend anyone.. the possibilty of that occuring is still there.

So I guess you've been warned.

"Dear Abby"

Dear Abby
I just want to talk
Could you go for a walk with me?
Dear Abby
Let's get out of this place
I'll take you far away from here

Is it too much to ask of you?
Oh the things I would do to you.

Dear Abby
We could be so good
Oh if only you would tonight
Dear Abby
For a few dollars more
Do you think I could score tonight?

Oh what did I say?
Why are you walking away?

Dear Abby
I'm sorry I've gone
And followed you home
It just had to be done
You wouldn't leave me alone
Dear Abby
It had to be done
It just had to be done

Sweet Abby
What else could I do?
I was about to lose my mind
Sweet Abby
We should do this again
And can I bring a friend next time?

Is it too much to ask of you?
After all that I gave to you?

Dear Abby
I'm sorry I've gone
And followed you home
It just had to be done
You wouldn't leave me alone
Dear Abby
It had to be done
It just had to be done

-marv

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(@lotto-king)
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Hi'ya Marv ,

Gee one would have to be very thin skinned to be offended by this work , I suppose there is a hint of sexual over tones in there but gee whiz you never spelled it out .

As for the actual song it's self I felt it was lacking of something the story left me wondering and unsatisfied . That's being totally honest with you it has a hint of "DEAR DIARY " about it .

Sorry Marv

that's my opion and I'm sure it will be different to many others.

cheers

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(@smokindog)
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I think i like it in a twisted Warron Zevon way :twisted: Dark indeed! I like that you did not spell it out completly and left much to the imagination. kinda has a "Psycho" feel to it (the movie). --the dog

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(@marvelousoptimist)
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I thought about something while i was out for breakfast... I didn't know if the Dear Abby cloumn would be recognizable by an international audience. "Dear Abby" is a newspaper column where people write in for advice. Just to clarify the reference.

-marv

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(@jamir)
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Hi'a Marv,

Well I didn't find it dark or anything, but then I have a really creative mind.

I like the idea of the Dear Abby story, but also think there is something missing, maybe you should have not left as much to the imagination here.

I can't seem to get a rhythm going either, but then you always manage to write such great melodies, I will just have to wait to see if you put it to music

Go well
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(@cheapthrill)
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hey marv,

i wasn't offended at all. you managed to write in such a vague way that someone shouldn't get offended by it. unless maybe it happened to them specifically.

i do have to agree with the song kinds of lacking something since the lyrics are so vague but i think that the right music it would fill in the holes. i get this kind of creepy sort of nine in nails sound going with this.

i think that if you were to add more to the story you would have to almost rewrite the whole thing other wise it would be too long.

the magic of this song comes from the fact that it is vague. i like the fact that it is written in the style of a dear abby letter. i also like how it changes from dear abby to sweet abby.

great job dealing with a touchy subject and pulling it off so well. would certainly like it hear this one put to music.

-CheapThrill


   
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