I agree with marv...it's hard restricting oneself to only 2 lines...I have a lot of fragments I have no use for but they are usually about 3/4 lines...
~~~
The flowers rot underneath my feet
And Death lives in the footsteps I leave
~~~
Gentle touch of bony hands
A skeleton dancing on its own grave
~~~
bye
bluenightnagel
P.S.:here's 2 of my longer ones...if it's any good
I choose white for my coffinbed
might even fool God so I'll
pass into heavenly grace for pure
~~~
my outline gets blurred
by the diamonds through which
you stare at me
"oh, eventually it will break your heart" - anders wendin
Somber--but might make a great gothic song. I like the gloom of your first couplet:
"The flowers rot underneath my feet
And death lives in the footsteps I leave."
Is this sorrow? Or is it guilt? Did someone die at my hand? Or did someone die that I'd rather be with?
Is there any light or anything growing for this person? I think a set of lyrics would have a great time exploring this start. Nice contribution!
hi copper
thank you.yes it was also supposed to be gothic-like.
as I did not get very much further with it, I can not really tell you if the person's situation might improve...hm...but I like sad songs so maybe not;)
anyway think about it as you like, grief, sorrow, guilt, apathy, suffering
it all is connected, isn't it?if somebody sees more in it than I do, hey that's great;)
love,
bluenightangel
"oh, eventually it will break your heart" - anders wendin
