I'm in a real rut at the moment - tried to get back in the swing of things with this topic, I had a couple of lines by Monday, since then, nothing - seriously, nothing whatsoever. It's been a long time since I went 3-4 weeks without a single idea, but I seem to have totally dried up - classic case of writer's block. This is what I wrote down a few days ago....since then, inspiration has resolutely refused to darken (lighten?) my doorstep.....
(Chorus)
Scrutinised and analysed, identified and classified,
No disguise, nowhere to hide, from the all-seeing electronic eye.
It was meant to be a comment on the way CCTV is taking over our lives in a big brother kind of way - but like I said, I'm struggling. Can't seem to string two coherent phrases together, even with the help of the OED and Roget's Thesaurus......
Ah well - there's always next week.....
:D :D :D
Vic
"Sometimes the beauty of music can help us all find strength to deal with all the curves life can throw us." (D. Hodge.)
I feel I'm being scrutinised
With their little beedy eyes
Now I truely realise
They just want to ruin my life
I'm not much of a guy to offer suggestions as it is something I really don't feel comfortable with , but your chorus got me thinking ..
I hope this has helped
Trev
Here is to you as good as you are
And here is to me as bad as I am
As good as you are and as bad as I am
I'm as good as you are as bad as I am
Hi Vic,
This is definitely a chorus to file away until the mood strikes you. It really is poetry!
Maybe grab a particular event, real or fictional, or a character who's life was brought under that scrutiny.
Joe had a life
Family and wife
Until the day
It was taken away
or
One little slip is all it would take
One mistep or one mistake
Broadcast in high-def
Now there's nothing left
or
Who's that by his side?
Societal suicide!
Maybe something along those lines...Let the creative juices flow!
Doug
hey vic,
writer's block... wow that su.cks... hope you defeat it soon:-)
really like your chorus. and as i've re-read 1984 a few months ago it reminded me of that immediately. a good book and a very good chorus;-)
this book is beautiful I know
just like truth captured in gemstones
and his face is an anchor
just like her touch will bent you
this cave won't make you invisible
this scraps of paper only let you falter
why won't you put your head in the sand
see, there is no place you can go
Scrutinised and analysed, identified and classified,
No disguise, nowhere to hide, from the all-seeing electronic eye.
there is no place you can savely say what is wrong
just my 2 cents;-) maybe it helps a tiny wee bit..
btw .. "societal suicide" ;-) that's poetry, too.
cheers,
straycat.
"oh, eventually it will break your heart" - anders wendin
Nothing to add. Vic, but isn't it amazing what others can do with just a few lines?!!!
Falling in love is like learning to play the guitar; first you learn to follow the rules, then you learn to play with your heart.
Nice chorus lines - and a great theme. :) You should definitely make sure you stick that in the Ideas Box for later. There's an excellent song to made when you find the rest of the bits.
The arrangement of those words in the first line reminded me a bit of old Bob's "All I Really Want To Do"
I ain't lookin' to lock you up
Block or shock or knock you up
Analyse you, categorize you
Finalize you or advertise you
...Simplify you, classify you
Deny, defy or crucify you
... etc.
Hang onto it. the rest might turn up any old time. 8)
Cheers,
Chris
Interesting lyrics and theme, Vic. I'm not going to add anything because I think the others have offered plenty of great ideas and soon it won't feel like your song anymore. I'm confident that when the moment strikes, something will come pouring out of you. Whenever I feel blocked I go do something that has nothing to do with writing or even music. I go for a run or a walk, or something where I can clear my head and eventually the ideas just come. Maybe you're just trying too hard. Anyway, good luck with that. Look forward to hearing the rest of your song.
Joe
