Y13W27 You Wish

I like the music. I like the individual verses and the chorus. But the story seems disconnected. I don't understand how the singer is a genie and loves the woman that the man wants. I'm assuming that the man is the one who picked up the magic lamp.

I also didn't understand the hangman's rope. It must be that the genie intends to kill the man. But how does that tie into the chorus? "You wish and I wish you well."

Hi Renee,
I don't understand how the singer is a genie and loves the woman that the man wants. I'm assuming that the man is the one who picked up the magic lamp.
You are spot on. Who says genies can't love...and love jealously? :mrgreen:
I also didn't understand the hangman's rope. It must be that the genie intends to kill the man.
Correct...wishes are well known for going wrong, so maybe the genie has his "love" fall in love with the man with a clause that says until he dies....and then the genie makes sure the man dies then and there or quickly
But how does that tie into the chorus? "You wish and I wish you well."
I was trying a twisted meaning; knowing that the genie kills the man, so it's either like a farewell....or it's like when then Smurfs change a lot of vocabulary like "that's great" becomes "that's smurfy"

.....so in genie talk, to wish someone well could mean like "I f......ed you up", or "you've been schooled" meaning you learned a lesson.

...but to validate your confusion, I agree it's not obviously clear. I think that's part of how we have to grow as songwriters. We have to reach for new ways to say old things.

Thanks for the critique of what hit and missed for you. :D

James

Hi James

Very enjoyable. Imaginative scenario and the "three wishes" in the chorus help spell things out nicely.

Especially liked the first two lines of the second half of the first verse:
You could’ve asked around
You could’ve asked her name

They do a great job of setting up both the genie's jealousy and response to the wisher.

In the second verse, though, you might consider swapping the second lines of each stanza in order to make them flow better with the first line:
You could’ve asked for kingdoms
Castles on the slopes
But you asked for love and it’s not a joke

You could’ve asked for Heaven
You could’ve been the Pope
But you asked for love and got a hangman’s rope

Just a thought. Great music, too, by the way. Wonderful to listen to.

Looking forward to more.

Peace

Hi David,
consider swapping the second lines of each stanza in order to make them flow better with the first line:

Thanks for the confirmation. That was how I had it at first. I had changed it because the Pope and rope seemed like a rougher transition in images.

I'll make the changes to the recording later today.

Thanks again. :D

James

I had changed it because the Pope and rope seemed like a rougher transition in images.

I get that but I don't think in this case the image of the third line has to (no pun intended) tie in to the first two lines of any given stanza. It's not the case in the first verse so no reason for it to be so in the second.

If anything, "asking for Heaven" is kind of what getting the "hangman's rope" is all about, no?

Peace

tie in
:lol:
It's not the case in the first verse so no reason for it to be so in the second.
Good point :D
If anything, "asking for Heaven" is kind of what getting the "hangman's rope" is all about, no?
Yes, that works. The idea was to increase bigger and bigger with what was asked for (kingdoms to Heaven), but still the wisher would not change his wish for (the genie's love interest)

...it's a bit ambiguous as to what happens to the singee after the hanging.

Thanks again.

POOF Lines swapped :mrgreen:

Beatleesque

Hi John,
Beatleesque
They were/are influential. :wink:

Thanks for the listen and post :D

James