Slow due to a computer crash and general busyness - but here it is. The last line of each group doesn't fit the rhythm because it is supposed to be dragged out. Playing a capo 4, G D C G - C... A-D G mostly. Little variation on ending lines and maybe I'll switch up on choruses.
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Sully
The weather was fine
conditions seemed right
fifteen-forty-nine cleared
for its usual flight
When up from the river
came a feathery strike
Fighting for air dominion
the fowl gave up their lives
Inside the cabin
they all understood
They'd heard an explosion
and that can't be good
The Airbus was broken
both engines were blown
It was falling, yes, falling,
going to its doom
But up in the cockpit
he need speak no word
So brave and so daring
Was Chelsey B Sullenberger the Third
The newspapers loved him
and praised his great name
The Air Force Academy said
it is here that he'd trained
They printed his picture
distinguished and lean
A friendly smile
and looking serene
Let's give him a trophy
and hold a parade
Not one single passenger
was lost on that day
Airliners aren't meant to land safely
on… water
Fowl play kamikaze
‘bove the River they say
If Sully's in the cockpit
He'll save the day
One hundred fifty passengers
Or so I've heard
Plus four airline staff
And Chelsey B Sullenberger the third
They called him a hero
after crashing his plane
I once hit a sparrow
and my car was just fine
When I jumped in a bean field
well, my father spoke French
Our Buick was totaled,
but everyone lived
In icy conditions
I once hit a rock
But no hero's welcome
Didn't have Sully's luck
Airliners aren't meant to land safely
on… water
Fowl play kamikaze
‘bove the river that day
Chelsey Sullenberger
is a hero they say
Walked up and down the wreck
to insure passengers had cleared
Then walked away calmly
Oh, Chelsey B Sullenberger the Third
Let's freeze him in ice
so the future can see
Exactly how handsome
a hero can be
We can shoot him in space
it's the final frontier
We'd say our goodbyes
though we'd miss him with tears
He may come back to Earth
five hundred years late
Maybe he'll meet a hawkman
and a robot Mel Blanc
Airliners aren't meant to land safely
on… water
Avian kamikaze
Hudson River they say
If Sully's in the cockpit
He'll save the day
He'd safely land a semi
if it fell from the sky
Never underestimate
that Chelsey B Sullenberger guy
Now Sully's had his fame
for a week and a day
But the following Tuesday
new news to displace
Brave Chelsey Sull's story
though he never fell from grace
Our next President's
inaugural day
We've had forty four of them
so I think it's a shame
How often do Airliners land safely
on… water
Oh, hasn't happened in, like, forty five years.
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You know, there's something to be said about birds, I never did trust 'em.
I kind of liked how you gave them an "evil personality"
The only thing that didn't flow for me was the last line in the chorus with his full name, maybe instead of
But up in the cockpit
he need speak no word
So brave and so daring
Was Chelsey B Sullenberger the Third -- Maybe change this to: "Was Chelsey Sully the Third." That's in each of the verses.
It's definatley hard to know though without hearing what you had in mind, I can only go by what I think it would sound like.
Good stuff!
In Space, no one can hear me sing!
I agree. Makes great poetry but I'd need to hear it
A :-)
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Jeremy,
Good lyrics! You seemed really in a flow :D
Suggestion
You have some backward sentences to force rhymes...if possible, play with them a bit more to straighten them out. For example,
"he need speak no word"
maybe
he barely spoke a word
"it is here that he'd trained"
to
he's one of our trained
or
he's one that we trained
or
they never leave untrained
or
all our men are trained
Good start. :wink:
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Jan 23
Ok..I just had a listen...Good choice of music :note1: and the verses still carry their cleverness...even not being able to get the capt's whole name in easily fits the mood of the song :lol:
Suggestion:
For me it feels a bit lengthy, but when I just checked the time it was 4 mins....consider doing some key changes or even a section or two in minor where the words might fit the mood.
Good song!
James
