Ok, so I had this idea immediately, but due to sickness and other pressing activities, didn't get to writing till today. We'll see about recording. Again, dependent on the wife... unless James' daughter is game. Anyway, italics are her part, regular is his, bold is together. I'm thinking a sort of Johnny Cash/June Carter duet. I have chords, but we'll start with the words for now.
Love Restrained
I saw you from accross the room, you were up there on the stage
I couldn't see too clearly, there were spotlights in my face
I did my job and asked the crowd,if they had any requests
So I yelled it out and you played for me, the song that I love best
And I knew that you were meant for me, when you sang right to my heart
But lady I don't know you, so please stay far apart
Or I'll get a
restraining order
but we were meant to be
I'll give you all my lovin', every hour, every week
Don't need a
restraining order
'cause I got a family
My wife don't take to kindly, to your psycho stalker needs (deeds?)
I was out at a church picnic, playin' softball with my son
I came and yelled to everyone, exactly what you'd done
How you swooned me and you stole my heart, without you I'm a mess
Oh Lord, did I sin against you, to be put through such a test?
I see her comin' down the steet, but there's just nowhere to hide
I'll love you and I'll care for you, if you'll only set aside
that there
restraining order
I've told you before
the judge said you gotta stay away, one hundred yards or more
I got a
restraining order
darlin' don't be crude
I know deep down you feel for me, the love I have for you
I'll steal o'er to your doorstep, leave you tokens of my love
Cupcakes full of razor blades, and a mutilated dove
I don't know what you're tryin' to say, but it's clear that you're a freak
Oh darlin', these weren't meant for you, and you can't prove that they're from me
You don't need to be vindictive, I wouldn't let you down
But your wife really should take a hint, and clear right out of town
and take that
restraining order
c'mon give it a rest
the judge said you gotta stay away, one hundred yards at best
I got a
restraining order
darlin' don't be crude
I know deep down you feel for me, the love I have for you
Don't need a
restraining order
'cause I got a family
My wife don't take to kindly, to your psycho stalker needs (deeds?)
I got a
restraining order
but we were meant to be (I can't get any sleep)
I'll give you all my lovin', every hour, every week (Living in constant torment, every hour, every week)
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As always, entertaining, Jeremy
I thought of some other rhymes you might want to consider in two places . . .
I'll give you all my lovin', every hour of all my days
Don't need a
restraining order
'cause I got a family
My wife don't take to kindly, to your psycho stalker ways
that there
restraining order
c'mon you've been told before
the judge said (you gotta) stay away, one hundred yards or more
KR2
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Jeremy,
I didn't see this coming but it's great! :mrgreen: :lol: :mrgreen:
I like these lines:
c'mon give it a rest
the judge said you gotta stay away, one hundred yards at best
I really like your story telling mode in the verses also.
:lol: ... unless James' daughter is game. I am not sure Jenny would be up to this, but there are a lot of talented singers at school :wink:
Nice write!
James
PS I sent you a congrats on a PM, but just in case you didn't see it, congrats on your family expansion project!
Man I love this! I can almost see Johnny and June singing it too! Great Job!
Falling in love is like learning to play the guitar; first you learn to follow the rules, then you learn to play with your heart.
restraining order
c'mon you've been told before
the judge said (you gotta) stay away, one hundred yards or more
Like it - i think i'll use this the first time, and the second time keep "give it a rest"
'll give you all my lovin', every hour of all my days
Don't need a
restraining order
'cause I got a family
My wife don't take to kindly, to your psycho stalker ways
yeah, didn't really like "stalker needs" or "deeds", but I do like "ways". To fit my rhyme scheme, though, the rhyme has to go with the 'cause I got a family' line, which could be changed too... still working on that one.
thanks - more suggestions greatly appreciated!
jeremy
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Wow, this week just went into a whole other direction LOL, nice job!
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