OK, this is my first try.
Humbucker
A Telecaster with broken strings.
The drummer fumbles the frontman sings.
Out of tune.
The manager leaves the bassist quits.
The music and the lyrics just don't fit.
It ends too soon.
Whoa oh oh
I never thought I'd lose my mojo.
I forget my bluesy lick again.
To disguise myself I turn up the gain.
I hope no one cares.
I remember the good old days.
Our music rang like sunshine rays.
Nothing else compares.
Whoa oh oh.
I hope I don't mess up this solo.
*Guitar Solo*
A telecaster with broken strings.
The drummer fumbles the frontman sings.
Out of tune.
Got half a mind to make a new start.
Retry and restart my art.
Back in tune.
Whoa oh oh.
I never thought I'd hate the show.
Hey
Well I'd say that's a very good first effort - good story, well told, fits the topic nicely....
Only part that didn't seem to fit at first was this....
Got half a mind to make a new start.
Retry and restart my art.
Back in tune.
"Retry and restart ny art" seems a little forced.......maybe something like
"I'm in the mind to make a new start,
This time I'll play from the heart,
And get back in tune"
That's just a suggestion.....
But like I said, very promising, hope you're going to stick around.....I for one think there's a lot of undiscovered songwriting talent out there, you've just proved my case.....QED!
:D :D :D
Vic
"Sometimes the beauty of music can help us all find strength to deal with all the curves life can throw us." (D. Hodge.)
