Good work, kingpatzer.You know what you've written is about, right? So take a pen and just write anything that comes to mind about it. Lines, verses, ...

Good try, but don't be afraid to write more.I can understand 'dying' on line two, but I think it could substitued with something better. Perhaps 'livi...

Excellent!First verse, line five, I think the 'and' should be changed to 'I.' Also, you should change line six to something that makes more sense, or ...

Good work.In a personal opinion, I think that the 'well' on the third line of every verse should be removed.In the third verse, I'd changed 'You think...

Impressive; if you can sing anything like Steven Tyler or James Hetfield, that's a straightshooter for sure--of course, you'll undoubtedly do it much ...

Sweet_Lou,I'm impressed. You're a natural.In my personal opinion, 'Silent' from 'Silent from the Thunder' should be changed to 'Silence'.Another perso...

Hey Alan,I've been coming to Guitarnoise for years. Those lyrics? Probably the worst the I've ever written. Not punk, though, definitely not punk."I d...