Hey Jerboa,Good work. Fun song. I don't think I would be able to show my face in public again if I admitted that "I'm in it for the girls" from the ...

Hey Trevor, Nice job here. You've got the start of a wicked song here. I can see past the verse to a whole story of a screwed up girl.I agree, very ...

Hey Kathy,Good work capturing the alone-but-not-lonely feel of someone playing by herself in verse 2. The empty barroom is great imagery.I must admit...

Hey Vic.Good solid stuff. Captures a bit of that spirit of rebellion that made rock great. I like the way its not judgmental; if I wrote it the song...

Hey Trevor,Not much to add here, but two things themes from the notes so far bear repeating.You're doing great on the recording. Many of us likely we...

Hey gang, thanks for the feedback.Paul, wow, I'm honoured that you remember Made in America. It's still one of my favourites too. I think you're rig...

Hey Pete,Great work. I think we all know that person ( or have been that person :) ).I was hearing the Elm's 'Downtown King' while reading it.I had t...

Hey John,A happy song from the theme "Everybody lies"? Genius.Minor point: I obviously have no way of knowing how this will sound when put to music, ...

Hey Kathy,I love the way you've fit the words to the rhythm. Some tongue twisters in there, but you didn't have any trouble with them.The only line I...

Great work Paul,The rework on the 3rd verse is bang on, brings it all back to theme.Im also really tempted to change the last chorus IMO, you shouldn...

Hey Bob,Great work on the rewrite. I especially liked the re-use of the "How can I believe you now..." line at the end.The wording on the first half ...

Hey Trev,I like it. It's the opposite of the blues; instead of a girl leaving and the guy getting drunk, the guy's leaves the excessiveness behind wh...