this is my second project, as promised. under it is the link for my youtube account for the vocals and drums/tempo. this really is intended as an exchange! i basically authored the concept and since i'm not in possession of any instruments currently. i played the drum portion on a chair with two pens. i need someone (capable) to elaborate on it and ultimately realize it into concrete "music". thanks.
(c)opyrighted lyrics:
Forget the fourth wall and the screen
And all the quotes you'd never mean to hurt me by
We're just friends
Inhaling your scent on my skin
your alibi is paper thin
I'm an anchor as ships sail by
Your pirates have more mercy than the storm we ride.
These waves are dizzying
As you decide
I'll reside in them (in them)
please breathe life back into me
so i can be whole again
Let me take a look at your frame...
You couldn't look more loose at a better age.
I know my cold words don't compensate
but it doesn't get hotter than that screwed look on your face.
Age is my favorite myth.
Time's the real killer in this.
So you better wear your Sunday dress
Cause Friday night is coming up
but your still going down
Lower than dirt.
But higher than the core.
We don't breathe air anymore.
You are the soil cushioning coffins of our real selves
while old souls stagnant
scoff and jeer
singing 'we don't need air anymore
WOOT! i love it :D
particulaly the line 'singing 'we dont need air anymore'
i really like that bit...i wish id thought of it...
hate writers that are better than me... :lol:
i listened to the recording, i reckon it should be sung to a much more poppy indie beat, like the shins, but thats just me.
yeah. i was going for fall out boy. they're my idol. thanks for the feedback
do you still like it after hearing the recording (mind the notes, not the vocals) or did you imagine a different sound? i'd like to know what you imagined upon reading the lyrics. what message did you get from them?
again thanks.
i got an image of offbeat vocals, a peppier beat than what you had recorded
if you were going for a fall out boy feel you need to talk about sex a lot more!! :lol:
what i like about it is you havent used a handful of cliches, youve said things in a different way and all in all i havent got a clue what its about, and thats how i like my music, they know what they mean, and you interpret it as you wish
that's downright flattering, man. hehe. ummm, yeah, i do need to sex it up in the name of fob. thanks for the kind words.
you've got great ideas. if you've got the technology, i'd like to see you give it a shot. i'd appreciate it.
i'd also like to hear your interpretation of it.
dont know if il get time for quite a while :S
i havent even had a chance to record my stuff and iv been meaning to for ages, but il print the words out and see what happens
any consideration is much appreciated.
I tried something, but the rhythm of the vocals was kinda hard to follow. Tell me what you think of it. If you could record to a metronome with the right pauses between the different parts I could try again and add some drums and stuff, would be easier to work from that.
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/songInfo.cfm?bandID=361288&songID=5444727
sweet melody, i appreciate the effort, but it's not at all what i'm looking for. at least not for this song. i agree, i'm not giving u much to work with.
i'll see if i can find an old metronome. maybe i can play the notes on one string but other than that (and the camera i record on) i'm technologically inept. hope you can keep helping me with this. your the only one that's tried. THANKS.
