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Heartwreck Hotel (Larry W. Jones 05/25/2007) (song#4677)
Open up them old dusty blinds
And let in some new sunshine
Yell down to the old bell boy
Tell him I've found a new joy
Gonna pay my bill, turn in my key
I can't sit still, I'm so happy
Because...
I'm hittin' the deck from heartwreck hotel
I ain't lookin' no more at gloomy skies
I've found a darlin' who thinks I'm swell
I ain't walkin' the floor with cryin' eyes
So, get my duffel cause I'm feelin' fine
I'm doin' the single shuffel one last time
Sign a traveller's check for a last farewell
I'm hittin' the deck from heartwreck hotel
Now, you can tell that sad old maitre d'
This old blues guitar ain't meant for me
I'll be singin' songs with a happier sound
For the darlin' who turned my head around (thanks Vic Lewis for this line change)
Well, on that heartwreck hotel window sill
Bluebirds never sang there 'cause of the chill (thanks Vic Lewis for this line change)
Now I see sunshine through the window pane
It sure looks fine, much better than the rain
I'm up to my neck in love as everyone can tell
I'm hittin' the deck from heartwreck hotel
Yeah, what the heck, I'm hittin' the deck
From heartwreck hotel
Kingwood Kowboy
Author of over 6,600 song lyrics
http://www.kingwoodkowboy.com/
Hey lwj001
Once again another very well crafted song , I have a question though
when do we get to hear you ?
I would love to hear how you put your songs into music in your own way
Once again
Well done
Trev
Here is to you as good as you are
And here is to me as bad as I am
As good as you are and as bad as I am
I'm as good as you are as bad as I am
Got to say, I don't like the title - just doesn't seem right to me. I can see why you wouldn't want to call a song Heartbreak Hotel - that's just too synonymous with Elvis. Maybe something like "The Heartache Hotel" would work - similar but different.
Couple of minor points....
"I'll be singin' songs with a happier sound
For a darlin' who'll turn your head around"
You're changing perspective mid-song.....maybe something like
"I'll be singin' songs with a happier sound
For the darlin' who turned my head around"
would fit better. Then this line, "There never sang a bluebird 'cause of the chill" looks a little forced - maybe "bluebirds never sang there 'cause of the chill" would flow more naturally.
As always, just MY opinion....nice bouncy upbeat song. Don't see too many of those around here!
:D :D :D
Vic
"Sometimes the beauty of music can help us all find strength to deal with all the curves life can throw us." (D. Hodge.)
Thanks Vic, for the suggested revisions. I applied them already.
Another "Heartbreak" hotel was out, so "Heartwreck" went with "Hittin' the deck" escape.
But it does seem corny because everybody's mind is already attuned to Elvis. Oh, well, what the heck!
And BarnaBusRox, sorry to disappoint because I am too.
I don't do music, just lyrics. I do a lot of humming. Need a music collaborator tech.
Kingwood Kowboy
Author of over 6,600 song lyrics
http://www.kingwoodkowboy.com/
lwj001
Well how about when I get alot better at this singing and playing capper I try one ?
You posted one about a train ages ago and I loved it , oops I was formally known as Hilch back then ...
Don't hold your breathe though I am pretty bad now ...
Trev..
Here is to you as good as you are
And here is to me as bad as I am
As good as you are and as bad as I am
I'm as good as you are as bad as I am
Hey BarnaBus Rox, have at it! Until somebody makes the music, they're just poems.
Can you post up some MP3's so we can hear ya?
Kingwood Kowboy
Author of over 6,600 song lyrics
http://www.kingwoodkowboy.com/
lwj001
Like I said when I alot better at this singing and playing thing I 'll have ago at makeing music for your words until then ..
Which will be a very long time to come you can always listen to to my posts on my playing in the " Hear here " forum on this site ..
I would love to do a Johnny Cash sort of thing ohh well One day
Trev..
Here is to you as good as you are
And here is to me as bad as I am
As good as you are and as bad as I am
I'm as good as you are as bad as I am
