Enemy Number One
I wrote this song the other day and was hoping that anyone could give me some advice or comments about it.
Thanks alot.
CH: Your my enemy,my enemynumber one.
You burn into my like a thousand suns.
Coz your my enemy number one.
Come and watch,watch what youve done.
Your the worst thing in my life.
Your the thorn in my side.
The something in my eye.
Thats why your my enemy,enemy.
Your my enemy number one.
(What do I owe you?
What have I done I never made you cry.)x4
I hate you, I hate you, I hate you
why dont you just die?
(You say I owe you, you say i wrecked your life.
You say I owe you, you say I messed with your mind.)x2
(You say I, You say I)x4
So what can I do? This s**t just aint true.I dont owe you.
I gave you everything, Id be whatever you wanted me to be.
But then you turn around and start
asking me what you want back from me.Me.Me.
A pound of flesh, a bloody mess.You are destroying me.Me.Me.
Your turning me insane, pulverising my brain.
You beat me hands down.
And Im just the blood stains on the ground.
Sick and twisted.If I blink I hope I'll miss it.
The hatred in your eyes.As it and your weak
conscience collides.
You bleed me dy.Dry.Im on the floor and you just pass on by.
Yeah.Oooh.Your my enemy number one.
Burn me athousand suns.The worst thing.
Thorn in my side.Thorn in my eye.A splinter in my mind.
Thats, the thats thats, the the thats why your my enemy.My enemy.
Number one.
To live kneeling down is worse than to die standing up.
Since no one else replied and I'll you my insight which may not be too helpful but it will push back up to the top and maybe someone more helpful could give you better advice. But what I think is that you seem to have left some words out which made reading it a little confusing. I do it all the time. In a strange way I kind of like it it is seems like something people could relate but not to the extent that you describe.
