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(@impossibleprincess)
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ERASE (One Night)

You are an angel
You're so nice
I am the devil
In disguise

You are the sun
Shine on me
I am the moon
Running free

You are the one – you'll be forgiven
You have the days - He wants to live in
I'm the mistake – He'll always regret
I am the night - He wants to forget

Chorus:
One night that never mattered
One night - he'll say it never happened
The night that became a lie
He'll forget, he'll deny
He'll erase from his mind

You are his star
His guiding light
I was his star
For one wild night

You are the inspiration
He can't live without
Me – a celebration
Never cared about

You are the one – you'll be forgiven
You have the days - He wants to live in
I'm the mistake – He'll always regret
I am the night - He wants to forget

Chorus:
One night that never mattered
One night - he'll say it never happened
The night that became a lie
He'll forget, he'll deny
He'll erase from his mind

You'll never get to heaven if you're scared of getting high!


   
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(@mcflyfan)
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ERASE (One Night)

You are an angel
You're so nice
I am the devil
In disguise

You are the sun
Shine on me
I am the moon
Running free

You are the one – you'll be forgiven
You have the days - He wants to live in
I'm the mistake – He'll always regret
I am the night - He wants to forget

Chorus:
One night that never mattered
One night - he'll say it never happened
The night that became a lie
He'll forget, he'll deny
He'll erase from his mind

You are his star
His guiding light
I was his star
For one wild night

You are the inspiration
He can't live without
Me – a celebration
Never cared about

You are the one – you'll be forgiven
You have the days - He wants to live in
I'm the mistake – He'll always regret
I am the night - He wants to forget

Chorus:
One night that never mattered
One night - he'll say it never happened
The night that became a lie
He'll forget, he'll deny
He'll erase from his mind

That's brill! Wish i could hear the tune... Keep it up

I'm better than normal, I'm abnormal! ;)
I <3 McFly 4eva!


   
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(@lotto-king)
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well done brilliant

this very good well done

bravo

cheers

L.K :wink:

Aghhhh

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I'm now a bloody senior member

Are you people trying to tell me I'm old or what ?

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(@mr-d)
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Posts: 22
 

That is an absolutely brilliant song. Very expressive.

Well done!
Dillon

I use heavy strings, tune low, play hard and floor it. Floor it. That's technical talk.
—SRV


   
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(@elecktrablue)
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Absolutely wonderful! Brought some wonderfully sad thoughts to my mind (which is a very good thing!). I think your lyrics are speaking to a very broad audience. Again, wonderful!!! Can't wait to hear it put to music! Kudos on some beautiful lyrics!!

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-:¦:- ((¸¸.·´ -:¦:- Elecktrablue -:¦:-

"Don't wanna ride no shootin' star. Just wanna play on the rhythm guitar." Emmylou Harris, "Rhythm Guitar" from "The Ballad of Sally Rose"


   
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(@impossibleprincess)
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I'm glad you all liked it. Don't be shy to criticize though... Comments are always welcome, positive or negative. Thanks!

You'll never get to heaven if you're scared of getting high!


   
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(@mcflyfan)
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You are his star
His guiding light
I was his star
For one wild night

I you want some negative points.... I don't have any cause this song is really good, but in the verse above, I think you shouldn't have repeated star, or you could put '[insert anything good here]-star' but I'm not sure if it would fit in the tune.

But anyway... it's still brill!

I'm better than normal, I'm abnormal! ;)
I <3 McFly 4eva!


   
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(@slowplay)
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First of all... WOW. That hurt to read (in the way I think you intended).

My only question is with

You are the sun
Shine on me
I am the moon
Running free

If I'm getting the song, then:
"He" = some guy
"You" = the woman he's with now
"I"/"me" = the singer (the other woman)

If so, then why do you want the "You" to shine on "Me"? Maybe "outshine me" fits better?

Still... wow.

Ice cream is a dish best served cold.


   
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