Don't delay for the garbage must be thrown out
Can't compare to the treasure that you've found
She is so lovely with her curly locks
I offer nothing but tangles and knots
So say goodbye to the one you never took time to love
Poor me
So say farewell to the one that was never good enough
For you
Don't insult me with unfilled apologies and tears
Can't believe you'd realize the worst of my fears
You once made this heart so free and wild
Now I'm nothing but a scared, little child
So say goodbye to the one you never held high above
Little me
So say farewell to the one that was never taken care of
By you
:cry:
it's good
It's pretty good as it stands, but I was left wanting a little more - maybe a bridge before the second chorus, or another verse.......I do like the way you've done two slightly different choruses, instead of just repeating yourself.......
Oh and welcome to Guitarnoise, the home for the musically insane......!
Vic
:D :D :D
Oh and a little pointer to how you see this would help, are we talking Rock, Metal, Country, Soul, Blues, Jazz.......?
"Sometimes the beauty of music can help us all find strength to deal with all the curves life can throw us." (D. Hodge.)
Welcome!
It's got a lot of substance, but more like play-doh has substance than linkn' logs do, in other words, you've gotta structurize more when writing, NOT EVERYTHING, because it become boring and droll, but choose a part you like the least; and goof around with all the rhythm, use your thesaurus, or whatever it takes to make it shine like a silver cube
I don't follow my dreams, I just ask em' where they're going and catch up with them later.
-Mitch Hedburg
Did you see that!
Hi reb,
The first verse is great. Keep working on the song. You can better it. :)
