This is the first song I've put up here for a few months now I think.
So Free
Verse 1
Reach out and take me
Please don't forsake me
Cos I just can't get you
Outta my head
Come on and hold me
Don't leave me cold, see
All I want is to lay with
You in this bed
Chorus
‘Cos
You and I
We could be so free
No chains to hold us
No ties to bind us
Nothing
But you and me
So now you see me
(Please) Don't ever leave me
‘Cos my heart would break down
Beyond repair
Bridge
You've taken over me
You're the very air I breathe
Now I just can't survive
All alone
So please tell me you're coming back home!
Chorus 2 / Outro
Yeah!
You and I
We could be so free
No chains to hold us
No ties to bind us
Nothing
But you and me
No
No chains to hold us
No
No ties to bind us
Nothiiiiiing>>>>>>>>>>>
But you and me
Any comments, suggestions or criticisms welcomed as always.
Cheers
Pete
ETD - Formerly "10141748 - Reincarnate"
Hey Pete
I can see a pretty up tempo beat happening here which I think would be very kool as it would totally contrasting to message with in the lyrics ..
Just a thought ...
The only nit pick I have is in your bridge which this line seems to end a bit too abruptly ..
All alone
My suggestion
All on my own
Trev..
Here is to you as good as you are
And here is to me as bad as I am
As good as you are and as bad as I am
I'm as good as you are as bad as I am
Welcome back!
Nice lyrics, they flow very well. I agree with Hilch, I see it as up tempo too. Have you got chords or a melody in mind?
Cheers for the quick responses guys!
For the bridge, the "All Alone" flows straight in from the previous line, so it could have been written;
"Now I just can't survive all alone"
More than anything I wrote it like that to remind me of how to sing it.
As for chords, I'm playing with E to F# to A to C#m to B, in various orders for the verses, though not happy yet.
For the chorus I'm looking at A to C#m to A to B, but again still playing
Sounding kinda similar to "Room on the 3rd floor" (McFly), but trying to get away from that! lol
Pete
ETD - Formerly "10141748 - Reincarnate"
