God Knows { with a MP3 }

Hey Trev

you've got a good start here, but as im reading it im finding it hard to keep a ryhthm going. Perhaps some slilght rewording could help the flow? When I read it again I tried changing a few bits, nothing major, but it did seem to help

I think would flow better as

I don't know where I'm going
Only God knows where I've been
I have never been an angel
And in my life I've sinned

I'm not much of a holy man
Wouldn't know where to begin
You really don't want my story
As I sit here with my gin

I haven't always been this man
You see before you now
For I used to be somebody
Once, Before I broke my vows

I don't want to know where I am going
And only God knows where I've been
I've never wanted to be an angel
And my lifes all been a sin

I don't want to know where I am going
And only God knows where I've been
I've never wanted to be an angel
And my lifes all been a sin

Most of the changes are just word reversals or shortenings (I have to I've).

I also toyed with;

I don't want to know where I am going
And only God knows where I've been
I'd never want to be an angel
All my life, thats been my sin

I'm hearing a faded, slow guitar picking with this, almost as if the man were saying this in the bar with the music quietly coming from the jukebox!

Did you have music in mind already?

Keep writing mate, you're hitting on winners here

Pete

Thanks for the feed back Pete ..

I agree with most of your changes but ..( there is always one of those )

I don't know where I'm going
Only God knows where I've been
I have never been an angel
And in my life I've sinned { And in my life I have sinnned )

That last line I think might be a accent thing I have a tendencey to join words together when I talk like when I say that line you might hear something along these lines ...( bit hard to explain)

Andin mylife Ihave sinnned

I disagree with somebody though ( to me just doesn't have the feel I was looking for even though the 2 words are very simular ..

The God only knows in the last 2 verses is supposed to be altered from the first time I mentioned it as it has a different meaning ..
God only knows is a saying here where as Only God knows is a reference to god knowing where I have been ..Trivial as it may seem there is a subtle difference between the 2 ..

Apart from those two little bits in your reply I agree with the others about my lifes all been a sin ...and so on

Thank you for your reply and your comments are taken on board ..

Thanks

Trev...

I just done a MP3

its' not great but its' the best I can do

Trev

Hey Trevor,

Ive just had a listen to this song, well done, this is a good song. I like you guitar work in there your timing is great (was that a metronome in the background ?).
As far as producing the mp3 is concerned I recommend that you record the voice and guitar separately, that way you can add just a little reverb (say 4 rooms worth) to the voice. I find that if I sing about 20-30cm away from the mike then the voice recording is much clearer. As for the song I liked it, maybe next time a different chord set for the choruses or maybe a different strumming pattern.

well done

cheers

Paul

OOOOpppps

The noise is my foot tapping I usually wear socks so it can't be heard but I thought it wouldn't be heard , oh wells

Thanks for takeing the time to listen and offer feed back , very much appreciated ..

I bought a new mic , a fairly expensive one just wanted try it out the old one I had to be very close to to get anything out of but I am finding this one I have even watch my breathing .

Thanks again

Trevor