I'm not really thinking about doing anything really big with this song. This was just something I thought up cause I was bored. If it's good though I might have some second thoughts. Tell me what you think. Criticize it to the bone. This song needs it! Okay, here goes!
Bored as Usual
In an empty room, just me and my best friend
Put our heads down on our desks as we wait for the end
Try to close our eyes and wait for a deep sleep
It's hard to fall asleep when you're as bored as you can be
CHORUS
Sitting there, bored as usual
With nothing left to do
You might as well just waste the day away
Cause I know I will too
I've waited for what feels like forever and a day
Inside this empty room cause I've wasted it away
My friend is fast asleep but he don't make a sound
So now it feels like I'm the only one around
Bridge
I'm so bored I could kill myself
I'm so bored it feels like I'm in hell
CHORUS
Repeat bridge
Repeat chorus x2
Maybe I could make the lines a little shorter or maybe change the third line in the chorus. I don't know. I want opinions people! Let's go!
And the fire from within burns undying!
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Okay, to the bone (man, you're asking for it.) Sounds like you were really bored and instead of putting energy into writing a good song, you copped out and wrote about boredom and consequently, the song is boring.
