Hi everybody, I'll be back to give some critiques, just wanted to get this out there. As usual ALL comments welcome. Thanks, Gwynne. PS, country tune, if you can't tell :wink:
Loving You
© 2005 Gwynne
Mommy can you stay awhile
Til I float off in my cloud
Tell me where I'm going
Are little boys allowed
Will you be here tomorrow
He asked as he went to bed
Mommy do you love me
As I kissed him on his head
Chorus
I want to look in your eyes each day
See what you see, live how you play
Laugh and love while getting through
Better than before loving you
I'll leave the hallway light on
Keep open the bedroom door
What'll we do tomorrow
That's what your dreams are for
Can you read me my story
The one with the prince and the shoe
Mommy do you love me
Of course I love you too
Repeat Chorus
Bridge
Dreaming makes your wings grow
Looking out for the stars below
Repeat Chorus
Better than before loving you
Hi Rocket girl
Anyone who has children could relate to this , lovely imagery the picture with your lyrics is so lovely .
The Title is what I am struggling with though " Loving you " I thought of
Ilike the hall way light line how true is that :wink:
cheers
L.K :arrow:
Aghhhh
Not only am I a senior citizen
I'm now a bloody senior member
Are you people trying to tell me I'm old or what ?
over 700 posts ( I really do need to get out more )
I thought this was great! I feel like I can relate to it even if I don't have children. (No, I'm not trying to say I am the little boy :))
I want to hear this, I want the chords, I want to learn to play it! Seriously!
Good job! :)
"I wish there was an over the counter test for my loneliness"
LK, thanks for the input and pointing out the title. Great advise.
manontheside, when I get it recorded I will post. Hopefully this week :?
Thanks for the replies. G. :)
Love the Title
nice change
Aghhhh
Not only am I a senior citizen
I'm now a bloody senior member
Are you people trying to tell me I'm old or what ?
over 700 posts ( I really do need to get out more )
