Hey ya'll~ Im really into writing poetry and then i add music to it.. I wrote a song about my great grandmas death yesterday.. i need to know what a good tune would be and what should be the chorus..sorry to sound so needy..ok here it is
Memories
I know you can't come back to me
Your gone forever now I see
But the memories will stay so long
They make me feel as though nothing is wrong
I can't believe you went so fast
It was so sad to see you in a casket
I'll always have that image in my head
Of you saying goodbye in your bed
I wish so bad I would have stayed
More memories could have been made
I was so little when you became sick
I don't even remember the real you that I spent so much time
with
I used to stay with you everyday
We'd have so much fun and played and played
Every Sunday I'd run out there
So you could see my dress and pretty hair
You always loved that and said such nice things
After that we'd play cards until the car horn would ring
I remember playing with that doll house
And running around till I was worn out
Sometimes I wish so bad you were still here
So I could whisper so many things in your ear
Thanks for reading and leave me any kind of comment.
Those are some very strong lyrics you wrote. I am not sure as to a tune you could put it to, but i enjoyed reading this. Good work.
thank you....my friends that read it liked it to
Not sure about a tune either but I LOVED the writing! good work keep it up!
thanks :D
Great lyrical Conent. I can kind of here a descending bass line arrangment with simple arrpegiated (spelling?) chords something like G F#/D Em or the such. A quiet acoustic song with most of the power coming from the vocals.
thats just my input
Micheal
"I named my son Marshall, yeah I named him after the amp. Of course that wasnt my first choice, I was gonna name him Peavy but my wife didnt like it."- Ron "Tater Salad" White
ok so like is the bass chords 4,5,and 6th strings...maybe u could do the tab so i can be sure.
lets try it with C to Am..I think it sounds more sombre. something like this
------0------0-----0------0--
-----1------1-----1------1---
----0------0-----2------2----
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--3------2-----0------0------
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then maybe to have a variation use G F#/D Em
------3-------2-----0----0--
-----0-------3-----0----0--
----0-------2-----0----0---
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--3------2------0----0-----
just an example you can play with this and the order maybe even just pick the bass notes and strum a partial chord. Experiment, play, make mistakes, and learn
Micheal
"I named my son Marshall, yeah I named him after the amp. Of course that wasnt my first choice, I was gonna name him Peavy but my wife didnt like it."- Ron "Tater Salad" White
ooo...i love it!!! I'm gonna work on it more and see what I can add to that. Thank you so much for helping out! :D
oh my goodness!! I've been working on that tune today and I came up with a tune I loved!!! I've also made:
I'll always have that image in my head
Of you saying goodbye in your bed
I wish so bad I would have stayed
More memories could have been made
The chorus. Im really excited! This is my first whole song!!! Thanks for all ur suggestions!
