Well, recently I have been a busy man. I recently started dating my best friends girlfriend, and it has been the best relationship I have ever had, in my entire life. Tommorow is actually our two week. She plays guitar, mostly acoustic, and we were listening to her music on evening and I made the comment that I liked a lot of the acoustic stuff she had. She asks me if I write a lot of acoustic songs, and I replied truthfully by saying no. She then told me I should write some songs and sing them, and that she would too. I asked her what she wanted me to write about and she said she wanted a song just for her about us. And she's serious. She want's this song.
So here's the lyrics. I've been working on them for the last couple of days, had my bands co-former Marcus look over the lyrics for me, made suggestions, ended up changing the whole thing around. Fixed it up again. Now I'm pretty satisfied personally with everything except for the lack of bridge and acoustic part to go with it. The worst feeling in the world when you have good music in your head but can't transfer it over to the fretboard.
So yeah, heres Something New:
In school I sit, my mind distracted
Thinking about, how I'm so attracted
I just want to be with you...
I just want to be with you...
And the rivers flow, or so I'm told
And the wind it blows, but it's getting old
Cause there's something new
and for me that's you
You save me now with every kiss
The cold is gone, replaced by bliss
The days are long, but my heart stays true
The sadness replaced with something new
The season change and the days they pass
The time we spend, I just want it to last
I don't know when I'll see you again
A smile without yous just pretend
Its been so short yet it's felt so long
and all these feeling keep getting strong
I just wanna be with you
I just wanna be with you....
You save me now with every kiss
The cold is gone, replaced by bliss
The days are long but my heart stays true
The sadness replaced with something new
Bridge
You save me now with every kiss
The cold is gone, replaced by bliss
The days are long but my heart stays true
The sadness replaced with something new
So comments on the lyrics or any suggestions on chords to use would be excellent. Thanks for the help.
Who needs a signature?
I mean really...
It's almost always lyrics...
or a cliche...
or garbage about me...
Lets just save YOU from the pain, ok?
I recently started dating my best friends girlfriend, ???
Won't be best friend for long......
In school I sit, my mind distracted
Thinking about, how I'm so attracted < Thinking about you I'm so attracted
I just want to be with you... < I just want to be near you
I just want to be with you...
I think adds a little more deepth ..
And the rivers flow, or so I'm told <-And the rivers flow so Iam getting told
And the wind it blows, but it's getting old <When the wind blows is it getting old
Cause there's something new
and for me that's you
Just my thoughts
Trevor
Here is to you as good as you are
And here is to me as bad as I am
As good as you are and as bad as I am
I'm as good as you are as bad as I am
Duff, I'm sure you meant to say your best friend's ex-girlfriend, right?
Or was it your ex-best friend's girlfriend? :lol:
Either way, I'm sure she'll be very pleased with the lyrics. Look forward to hearing it with music.
Margaret
When my mind is free, you know a melody can move me
And when I'm feelin' blue, the guitar's comin' through to soothe me ~
Hey Duffmaster,
Definitely the makings here. It all depends on how you sing it of course, I had a noodle with the guitar and came up with this:
Verse
In school I sit, my mind distracted
Thinking about, how I'm so attracted
To you oooh
To you oooh
To you oooh
To you
Chorus
And the rivers flow, or so I'm told
And the wind it blows, but I would never know
Cause there's something else that's in my life
That something else is you
The reason I went for this approach is the “less is more†idea. A few simple lines then focus with the “To You†lines. Or you could swap it around and have the “To you†‘s in the chorus, I think they would give you your hook. Of course you would have to change the title of the song to “You†:D .
Anyway just a couple of ideas that you can do what you like with, you've got a nice song here.
Paul
what kind of tune do you have in mind for this? ifeel somthing light hearted and up beet here
when I read your lyrics, I thought jack johnson a little tweeking and you could have somthing real good here
good luck
Mystic
HAHAHA...
It's my best friends girlfriends best friend... :shock: sorry guys!
Me and my bestfriend are closer than ever now.
Paul, I really like changing "But its getting old" to "I would never know" A bit more romantic that way.
Trevor, I like I just want to be near you, I'm going to incorporate that into the song somehow. After some tweaks i'll post again.
Who needs a signature?
I mean really...
It's almost always lyrics...
or a cliche...
or garbage about me...
Lets just save YOU from the pain, ok?
To quote Ian Hunter: "Never write song about your old lady. And if you do, don't let her know it's about her." He said that before he played the song "Bastard."
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HAHAHA...
It's my best friends girlfriends best friend... :shock: sorry guys!
OOOOHHH! :roll: What a relief! :lol:
Margaret
When my mind is free, you know a melody can move me
And when I'm feelin' blue, the guitar's comin' through to soothe me ~
Finally found the right chords. I recorded today, EQ'd and doctored to my liking. Tommorow when I can sing and no one will be home to cringe I shall record the vocals.
I'm pretty happy with the guitar part, I think you'll all like it.
Who needs a signature?
I mean really...
It's almost always lyrics...
or a cliche...
or garbage about me...
Lets just save YOU from the pain, ok?
The version I'm recording today -
In school I sit, my mind distracted
Thinking about, how I'm so attracted
I just want to be with you...
I just want to be near you...
And the rivers flow, or so I'm told
And the wind it blows, but I would never know
Cause there's something new
and for me that's you
You save me now with every kiss
The cold is gone, replaced by bliss
The days are long, but my heart stays true
The sadness replaced with something new
The season change and the days they pass
The time we spend, I just want it to last
I don't know when I'll see you again
A smile without yous just pretend
Its been so short yet it's felt so long
and all these feeling keep getting strong
I just wanna be with you
I just wanna be with you....
You save me now with every kiss
The cold is gone, replaced by bliss
The days are long but my heart stays true
The sadness replaced with something new
Bridge
You save me now with every kiss
The cold is gone, replaced by bliss
The days are long but my heart stays true
The sadness replaced with something new
Who needs a signature?
I mean really...
It's almost always lyrics...
or a cliche...
or garbage about me...
Lets just save YOU from the pain, ok?
Its all done.
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/pageartist.cfm?bandID=551690
There is a fifteen second pause in the beggining which is going to be an arpegio intro. Let me know what you all think.
Edit: Added arpeggio intro, and am putting new version on soundclick right now.
Who needs a signature?
I mean really...
It's almost always lyrics...
or a cliche...
or garbage about me...
Lets just save YOU from the pain, ok?
