Used to be there everyday
All day long, for me to take
We used to have so much fun
But something's been going on
We used to talk all night
Now just worries on your mind
It seems like you're always occupied
Wish I could lift your senses
Wish I could make it better
However I try, it's never right
Whatever I do, it's just no use
(chorus)
Don't know what is happening
Miss the joy you used to bring
Now everything has changed
And nothing feels the same
Don't know what is going on
Don't know what I'm doing wrong
Everything has changed
Nothing feels the same
Used to smile when you saw my face
Every time you looked my way
We used to play any game
A new one for each new day
We used to walk the park
Hand in hand, heart to heart
But it seems now we're worlds apart
Wish I could lift your senses
Wish I could make it better
However I try, it's never right
Whatever I do, it's just no use
(chorus)
Don't know what is happening
Miss the joy you used to bring
Now everything has changed
And nothing feels the same
Don't know what is going on
Don't know what I'm doing wrong
Everything has changed
Nothing feels the same
You'll never get to heaven if you're scared of getting high!
Hi Princess
this is really good at first I thought your chorus was too long but after reading it several times it suited the song more and more , well done
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cheers
L.K
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Maybe you are right. The chorus may be a bit long... I've been told the same thing by other people on a different forum. What changes would you suggest?
You'll never get to heaven if you're scared of getting high!
In answer to the long chorus conundrum, in the 8 lines you have two sets of four... perhaps use the first four lines in the first chorus, and then the second four lines for the second chorus. as the 3rd and 4th lines of each set are the same, there is enough commonality, and personally i enjoy it when the chorus changes slightly.
the other alternative, where you keep the long chorus, is to ensure it stay interesting, by changinh the melody slightly for the second set of four lines (particular lines 5th and 6th lines). I even thought if you perhaps got rid of line 5 or six, and stretched out the line you left to cover the same amount of time (ie sing the melody at half the speed) it would keep the chorus intersting.
just some ideas, dunno if they will help.
cheers
sozay
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Hi again
you wrote
"(chorus)
Now everything has changed
And nothing feels the same
Don't know what is happening
Miss the joy you used to bring
Everything has changed
Nothing feels the same "
I thought
"Don't know what is happening
Miss the joy you used to bring
Don't know what is happening
Miss the joy you used to bring
just my opion there but the other lines to me just seem to be repeating what you have already said
Hope you don't mind
Cheers
L.K :arrow:
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