Once again, your comments (good or bad) are welcome.
Satisfied, Not Loved
Your body's spent, your eyes are closed
and still she asks for more
With long brown hair and eyes like coal
are you in love or waging war?
Shadows flicker 'cross the room
while music filters through
The scent of perfume fills the air
solo dances spun by two
Body's here, here to stay
mind is far, far away
I'm satisfied, not loved... satisfied, not loved
Fingers beckon, you obey
Souls in circles, not fade away
I'm satisfied, not loved... satisfied, not loved
Still the night, it closes in
you're breathing all alone
Better you should face the truth
than shape a heart of stone
Shrill sounds of numbing violence
are ringing in your ears
While trappings of your recent past
provoke your darkest fears
Body's here, here to stay
mind is far, far away
I'm satisfied, not loved... satisfied, not loved
Fingers beckon, you obey
Souls in circles, not fade away
I'm satisfied, not loved... satisfied, not loved
In crystal balls and fairy tales
a white knight saves the day
In bedrooms and in nightmares
your secrets are betrayed
Love wilts beneath the heat of lust
when peeled under the knife
Of this the soul that you once loved
and now is just your wife.
Body's here, here to stay
mind is far, far away
I'm satisfied, not loved... satisfied, not loved
Fingers beckon, you obey
Souls in circles, not fade away
I'm satisfied, not loved... satisfied, not loved
The unexamined life is unworth living - Aristotle
Hi, please feel free to disregard this as the ramblings of an idiot, as I have no clue when it comes to song writing. Personally I think this is a wonderfull song and I can really sense the pain?, frustration? this guy feels.
I am not too sure on the "not fade away" lyrics in the chorus (Rolling Stones, sorry)
I would love to hear this though, do you have an MP3 of it?
The only thing that keeps me from realising my full potential is the depressing awareness that it wouldn't take much time or effort...
Chords are done, working on a recording. I can't sing a lick so any resemblance to actual vocals is purely coincidental.
The unexamined life is unworth living - Aristotle
Looking forward to hearing it,
The only thing that keeps me from realising my full potential is the depressing awareness that it wouldn't take much time or effort...
Excellent.
I really liked "solo dances spun by two" and the whole theme of "satisfied, not loved".
The verse that sprang to life the least for me was the one starting:
"Still the night, it closes in
you're breathing all alone "
Not saying it's bad, it wasn't, it just didn't elicit the immediate response that the others did.
Look forward to hearing it (and your other one too). Don't make us wait five years for the music. :D :D
Cheers, Chris
The verse that sprang to life the least for me was the one starting:
"Still the night, it closes in
you're breathing all alone "
Not saying it's bad, it wasn't, it just didn't elicit the immediate response that the others did.
My objective here was in that reflections of how one is feeling come out in sharpest relief in the still of the night.
Thanks for the comments and reply. I will try to post the music shortly (if not the charts)
The unexamined life is unworth living - Aristotle
Excellent.
The verse that sprang to life the least for me was the one starting:
"Still the night, it closes in
you're breathing all alone "
Not saying it's bad, it wasn't, it just didn't elicit the immediate response that the others did.
Now that was the verse that really did it for me.
The only thing that keeps me from realising my full potential is the depressing awareness that it wouldn't take much time or effort...
to each there own :)
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