Well you may have read this, before I put it in the wrong section. This time I changed it just a little bit tell me if you understand it or think it's any good thanks.
Maybe you know him
Maybe you don't
He trys to not, but lust comes in
Seasons Of Black
And he'll try to fight
Try to fight back
But it doesn't work
Just doesn't work
When sin is finished
I know how it felt
Like being whipped
With that black belt
And he'll try to fight
Try to fight back
But it doesn't work
Just doesn't work
Not do it again, he tries
But tommarow it starts
Soft and sweet, in he buys
Inside it tastes, that biter tart
hi
i just don't understand this line :
He trys to not, but lust comes in
it just seem to flow like the rest
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He trys to not, but lust comes in
Maybe I should change it to sin but what I mean is just all the cravings of people like all the things the flesh wants.
what I was getting at was
"He trys to not,"
Iknow where you want to go with this but to me it is not getting you there ( as the reader )
maybe
"He try's not to , but lust comes in "
to me that says alot more and is correct gramma
just my old opinion and my 5 cents worth
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Not only am I a senior citizen
I'm now a bloody senior member
Are you people trying to tell me I'm old or what ?
over 700 posts ( I really do need to get out more )
Ahh ok i see what your getting at. thanks.
I agree with lotto king. Glad you found that line. I read it and that one line didnt make sense to me. makes sense with "He tries not to, but the lust/sin comes in" (whichever u choose). This sounds good tho.
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