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(@guitargeek)
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hey, havent posted here in ages, been in a bit of a writing bad patch....this is the only full song i've been able to come up with in ages so feedback would be great!

'Simmering'

I'm trying to keep my cool coz I've been shouting all day
The ignorance in people still manages to blow me away
How they can be so obviously wrong
And still sing their happy song

I'm locking myself away so I can think quietly
As if I don't do enough of that already
Your crowding me and my thoughts
And I wish you would leave

Don't stand in front of me
don't tell me I look a mess
Coz I know all of this, I know everything
And its my choice if I choose not to listen

I want to get away and be some kind of traveller
The type that have all the experience and stories
They're never tired or boring and they never watch TV
I wish that were me

The comforts of my home don't comfort me no more
I don't want to sleep but I don't want to go out neither
I'm not in a rut coz I know what I'm doing wrong
I just need some fun

Don't stand in front of me
don't tell me I look a mess
Coz I know all of this, I know everything
And its my choice if I choose not to listen

And now here it goes, I can feel it bubbling
I'm going to break out and embarrass myself
But I cant help it I just got to let it out
I know I'll regret it
Coz I always regret it.


   
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(@stefhy)
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hey! i really like it, infact i love it.. The words you chose, the subtle rhyme scheme/flow , the story behind it.... Well done! Btw, i have had one of those 'bad writing streaks' before, and it usually lasts a really long time for me, but than all of a sudden I can't stop writing songs, and they're really not half bad...all it takes isa bit of rest i think, just don't over 'write' urself lol ( i realize that makes no sense but I'm sure you all know wat i mean)... Oh and before i forgot, I loved the chorus! haha I'm a bit hung up on it actually, *repeats self for effect* - Well done! Good luck with everything :)

I know it wasn't reason,
That made me do what wasn't right
but sometimes my heart falls prone
to the nature of your spite.


   
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(@lotto-king)
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hey G G

long time no see , yeah been through my own dry spell a while ago it's hard to get out of , but just keep making notes on what you see and feel and hear.

good lyrics here GG probably not your finest work but hey your back in the saddle so keep going
:wink:
cheers

L.K :arrow:

Aghhhh

Not only am I a senior citizen

I'm now a bloody senior member

Are you people trying to tell me I'm old or what ?

over 700 posts ( I really do need to get out more )


   
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(@guitargeek)
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thanks stefhy and lotto king for your response! I'm glad you enjoyed it, i agree its not my best but hopefully i'm out of my writing block and can start doing better! I'm going to give the sunday songwriters one a go this week as i havent done it for ages!


   
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