OK, so this song I wrote two years ago, in 7th grade. It can be inferred two ways. One, is that its a girlfriend leaving the boy...basically in the dust and he has no idea what to do. Second, what LIFE has taken from any one of us..(what I intended it for). When I wrote this song, it was not one of my happiest times...but neither are any of my songs
Taken Away
I want you to see
What you've done to me
You've taken away
All I have
I've lost all hope in life
There's nothing left for me
[Chorus]
I can't take this anymore
I want it back
Like it was before
But nothing I say
Will change time
These feelings I feel
Are unknown to me…lost from me
You've taken it away
And I want it back
But you won't give it back
Just give me something to live for
[Chorus]
[Bridge]
I'll find a way
To live like this
Lost and alone
All by myself
I can't escape you
You're all around me (x2)
[Chorus]
Hope you like it, and as always, Comments returned ASAP. Please do comment...I know its not perfect. None of them are.
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-Nick
Nice job and pwerful message, life beats ya down, find a way to get back up. The only thing I would say is that this line "Are unknown to me…lost from me" maby shouldn't have the "lost from me", it doesnt really seem to fit. Thats just my opinion take it for what worth you want.
hmmm...okay, thanks man. I'll look at the song again and see what I can do. Thanks for the comment.
Do what you love, love what you do
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-Nick
hmm so your a freshman writing songs? very nice, well im a sophomore, i like your music alot, sounds like you have alot of influence from life that you incorporate into them.
It's 15 Till And She Has The Other 45 In Her Mouth.
yea but i wrote this in 7th grade :). THanks for your comment man. It means a lot to me. nething i can add or fix?
Do what you love, love what you do
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-Nick
lol actually i think the songs perfect, yet thats to just me. I know there will be others with "constructive critizisim". You have a mp3 for it?
It's 15 Till And She Has The Other 45 In Her Mouth.
actually...no sorry...My guitar playing isnt very good...and in the way I have track for school...i run at meets and practice lasts until 5 PM EST Time...and i never have time to practice...let alone lessons...so lessons are postponed for awhile...so no mp3...sorry :(...maybe in a few years...?? lol!
Do what you love, love what you do
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-Nick
lol same here, i do football and wrestling, so it takes up alot of time usually... i almost always write songs in school when i daze off, not to brag but im very good at drums/piano/tenor sax, weird combination..., im learning guitar I have down 3 power chords, and i've been practicing so i can play faster, its coming along but it will take a while. If your really interested in guitar, take short periods of time and watch a lesson video or go over to a friends house who has been playing 2+ years, and ask for advice. Whew this is a long post.
It's 15 Till And She Has The Other 45 In Her Mouth.
lol thats ok...i like attention! lol! yea, good idea...i keep meaning to replace my strings...but never get to it...lol bc right now it sounds horrible!
Do what you love, love what you do
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-Nick
:o , i replaced mine on my acoustic about 3 weeks ago, then 2 days later i stepped on my acoustic.... i wanted to cry, but at least i have my electric for now
It's 15 Till And She Has The Other 45 In Her Mouth.
ouch...poor guitar...
Do what you love, love what you do
http://www.acidplanet.com
-Nick
