Hey guys here is a song I wrote, just looking for what you think, or what I could change to make it sound better, thanks!
Walking down the last allyway
searching for something i lost yesterday
trying to remember the good times
as a child growing older
Chorus:
Living my life away
in the city, never go to sleep
come with me tonight
tonight....
Your standing there
in your yellow shirt
don't let me go
cus thats just what I wanna do
but i dont wanna leave you
Chorus:
Living my life away
in the city, never go to sleep
come with me tonight
tonight....
Emptyness coming from the left and right
is a part of everyones life
just trying to figure it all out
cause its not rightful tears that you've cried
Chorus:
Living my life away
in the city, never go to sleep
come with me tonight
tonight....
Special K
hey! i love it, tho i really wish i could hear it, that certain line about rightful tears was brilliant, very very impressive :D. I have tried writing a few songs of my own, a few of them I like much more, but i don't think any of them are that nicely worded, and that was definately a nice line, well done. *bows to master* hehe
I know it wasn't reason,
That made me do what wasn't right
but sometimes my heart falls prone
to the nature of your spite.
pretty good. i like it.
I dig it. Usually when I read someone else's lyrics I'll pick up my guitar and sing it the way I kind of think it should sound. The second verse doesn't seem to fit the measure quite right. Could you send us a recorded version! I have no clue what type of vibe this song is supposed to have. "Emptiness coming from the left and right" ... fav line. I played the song with a palm-muted Am C G Em progression for the verses and Bm G D Am C D Chorus with the muting. Am I the only one does this? Heh ...
Really good. The imagery is pretty good.
