loveless marriage {week 36}

Hi Trevor,

God how I hate to see unanswered postings . . . . .

I'm kind of hot and cold with this one.

I really like
Do you feel so disparaged
Trapped in your loveless marriage
One thing I don't understand
How could you marry that man

In particular the rhyme of disparaged with marriage.

Not really thrilled with
Now you are looking
A new love your booking

Seems like a thoughtless filler and I know you can do better.

Then again I really love your next verse
Then see you in curlers and slippers
Do you ever make the effort for him
No you rather wear your bum hungry pants at the gym

And the next verse has me cold again. I would guess the reason you never liked him just wasn't a whim . . . . . and maybe something like, " I knew I should have sent you a letter, saying you could do so much better."

Still, Trevor, I am amazed how much your writing has progressed. You've come a long way baby!

Neil

Thank Neil

I just thought this was sooo bad it didn't even get a response ..

yes are right when you said this :

and maybe something like, " I knew I should have sent you a letter, saying you could do so much better."

Been thinking about something simular myself , like expanding on the letter thing , and what was in it ..

ANother booking well ... OK point taken I could do better I suppose ..

Thanks for looking and offering suggestions
Trev.... 8)