SSG Week 36 - Trying to feel alive

This ended up being waaaaaay different to what I started writing, but hey that's progression I guess!

It's written with 2 vocalists in mind; one singer/screamer and one rap-rock style rapper
(think Linkin Park and you're along my train of thought)

Throughout the lyrics there are notes on how it's being sung in (...) so pay attention! lol :P

Trying to feel alive

Verse 1 (sung softly and quite slow)

Feeling dead
From the very core
A blackened soul
Hides behind a sealed door

A mind enclosed
In shattered glass
A torment trapped once
Now freed at last

Chorus

Blood, Sweat and Tears (sung loud, with “Tears” prolonged)
Falling from me (rapped over the “Tears”)

Raining down (sung loud, with “Down” prolonged)
My soul it seems to bleed (rapped over the “Down”)

Blood, Sweat and Tears (sung loud, with “Tears” prolonged)
Just tearing out of me (rapped over the “Tears”)

Raining down
I'm just trying to feel alive (sung like the verse)

Verse 2 (sung softly and quite slow)

Decaying mind
Still set in stone
No light, no sound
Always got to be alone

Buried so deep
Can't be retrieved
Now I'm lost inside
An endless dark bereave

Chorus x1 (at the last line, draw out the “alive” getting louder into a scream)

Bridge (shout/scream)

Come
Come and take from me
Everything that I believe
My heart and soul
Pain and Torment
Shut away from me

Come
Come and take from me
Every reason I have to be
So lost and found
Buried underground
Trying to hide from me

(Straight into)
Chorus x2

On the last chorus;

(sung like the verses)
Raining down
Just trying to feel
Raining down
Just trying to feel
Raining down

(screamed like the bridge)
Trying to feel
Trying to feel alive

Comments etc. welcomed as always

Pete