SSG Wk 3 "no words"

I think it's really good except the last two verses which don't seem to do the job as well as the others. The two verses are

Why is it that other get all the glory
But when i write my stories
All the glory is lost?

Music is an art
theres more to it that words and phrases
Meaning is the key
but my meaning cant break free

The rest of the verses are good, flow well, and I think express the an interesting way of looking at this weeks SSG assignment.

"It told me to write a song".....

I presume that's the muse?

This is not bad at all izzy....what you need to do is draw on your song-listening experience....just listen to your favourite songs, dissect how they're put together.....

I find it helps, when I have an idea for a song, to sort of hum the melody line in my head....then fit chords to it....

Your song sort of reads, verse chorus bridge outro....

maybe a couple more verses, keep the chorus....in the extra verses you could try to get your rage at your inarticulacy across, i.e. you have something to say, don't know how to say it....hey man. you're only 16, for a teenager this is pretty cool....you got the point of the song across ok.... I suggest you go away, work on it a little, and re-post when you've had a few fresh thoughts.....

good luck Izzy.....

:) :) :)

Vic....

(It's a start....and I believe in starts....*the sax player from "the Commitments*)