So here's one of the first songs I ever attempted at writing, it only ended up as a chorus but it's got a nice ring to it so I gotta figure out some verses. Also I don't know what but it sounds too much like another song that I can't quite put my finger on.
Curious girl
Curious girl
Curious girl looking at me.
Curious girl
Curious girl
Curious girl what you thinking?
Well don't be shy.
I don't bite.
I may seem rough but I'm allright.
So curious girl
So curious girl
Curious girl won't you run away with me?
Currently I'm stuck without any thoughts for a verse, perhaps a phrase or a line could get me started.
Hi,
Welcome to SSG! And I agree, you have a pretty good chorus going. First thing that came to my mind was, what makes you so curious . . . . . . . . so you could explore that avenue or pehaps where cuiriosity might lead you . . . . . or from another point of view . . . . . what she might find . . . .
Good writing!
Neil
I agree with Neil ..
Welcome welcome welcome
Is she curious or are you curious of her ? MM food for thought maybe ..
What is it that attracted you ? Her eyes ? Lips etc ....
Tell us about her and her features , maybe her long flowing hair and her luscious lips ...Or her big brown eyes ...
Oops wrong forum :D :D :D :D
I m sure you get the idea
Trev.. :wink:
Here is to you as good as you are
And here is to me as bad as I am
As good as you are and as bad as I am
I'm as good as you are as bad as I am
I agree, the chorus is good. Fo the verses, it seems like what you are trying to go after is getting the girl to go beyond mere curiosity and to take a chance with the song's protagonist. I cannot think of any specific lyrics to go with that at the present time. the one set of lines in there kind of goes in that direction and maybe with some polish, something like that will do. let me think on it and maybe something will come to me.
Regards,
Mike
"Growing Older But Not UP!"
another welcome from me to you, GreatWhiteNorth :wink:
nice name.
have to second the others, i like what you got. to me it does not seem to need very much. maybe just a few more lines, if at all. the way i hear it it would work well as some sort of duet. the girl just throwing in a few lines ...
maybe something like:
Curious girl
Curious girl
Curious girl looking at me.
looking at the cracks in the street/looking at the vast sky behind him
Curious girl
Curious girl
Curious girl what you thinking?
years ago, bird in the snow
a reason for leaving
Well don't be shy.
I don't bite.
I may seem rough but I'm allright.
So curious girl
So curious girl
Curious girl won't you run away with me?
won't he/you, won't he/you leave with me
won't you run away with me?
boy- blue, girl-light green, both-green, slash- alternate version
just a tiny idea, maybe miles off the mark :wink:
cheers,
straycat
"oh, eventually it will break your heart" - anders wendin
Welcome GWN!
That is a good start you have going there.
A few thoughts to help you with the verses.
Why is she curious?
"Could it be....."
"Or is it my..."
Do you want to resolve why she is curious or leave the listener curious?
What do you want us to know about her (while leaving her mysterious enough to keep our interest)?
