A trip to the beach leads to the stars. I wrote at a near by beach about couple I saw laying in the sun.
Dream Catcher
The air was steaming cold
The sands warm about our feet
We Walk
Shoreline shone deep blue
Even though the waters cold
We float
Dream Catcher
Take us to the moon
Feel freedoms demands
Now, Dream Catcher
Take us to the moon
Air once again so cold
a Canopy in the stars
We fly
And I Swear shes the One
And I swear shes the one
And I swear shes the one
Dream Catcher
Take us to the moon
Feel freedoms demands
Now, Dream Catcher
Take us to the moon
And I swear Shes the one
and I swear shes the one
and I swear shes the one
The air was steaming cold
The sands warm about our feet
We Walk
Shoreline shone deep blue
Even though the waters cold
We float
Dream Catcher
Take us to the moon
Feel freedoms demands
Now, Dream Catcher
Take us to the moon
Very nice, I like the way you repeat "and I swear she's the one" that would be good set to music i think 8) Its simple and to the point and gets to the point in a poetical way :D :D -the dog
Like your use of imagery...I almost feel like I'm at the beach looking (in a non-voyeuristic way, of course!) at the couple frolicking....
Nice flow, works well for me, captures the assignment nicely.
:) :) :)
Vic
"Sometimes the beauty of music can help us all find strength to deal with all the curves life can throw us." (D. Hodge.)
I liked it. The idea was good, the image "dreamy", and the title fits well the song. I especially like the line "Feel freedoms demands."
"Don't get trapped by the tyranny of four" Rikky Rooksby
