Late, I know. And incomplete, I know. But I was picking some chords, found a melody and needed some words to hang on it so's I wouldn't forget. The 'packed my bafs' thing worked (with a little alteration :lol: ). so here it is. to be continued (with more referecne to the phone call), but any comments now would be welcome.
Disclaimer: As per My Birthday Card, this aint biographical. And the melancholy is the chords fault, they inspired it. Honest! :roll: Man, I'm gonna end up getting a reputation if I carry on like this..... :wink:
Ghosts
copyright Scrybe 2008 :lol:
1.
I packed my bags so quietly
Then the phone rang
And I had to answer it
You understand
The kid's asleep, I checked on that
He's still wrapped up in dreams
And I'm not sure he'd notice
The door closing if I leave
2. (chorus)
But I have seen the ghost of my mother
Dressed in the clothes I chose to wear
And 'though I never met ya father
His legacy permeates the air/heir
Interesting you should leave off at that point - there's a couple of different ways you could go with this. Might be interesting to try something like....
"And though I never met YOU father,
YOUR legacy permeates YOUR heir...."
Like father, like daughter ..... which'd take you in a different way to where it seems to be going.
It'll be interesting to see what you come up with, anyway!
:D :D :D
Vic
"Sometimes the beauty of music can help us all find strength to deal with all the curves life can throw us." (D. Hodge.)
I agree with Vic on the addition of the word "YOUR "
It adds a little personality in my opinion ..
I really enjoyed reading the first verse / stanza ..
Wonderful piece of writing there in my opinion
Cheers
Trev.. :wink:
Here is to you as good as you are
And here is to me as bad as I am
As good as you are and as bad as I am
I'm as good as you are as bad as I am
Thanks guys...I've left off working on this one upon realising I could quite easily (I think) put the lyrics of No Water Dear to it instead! Lol, had that one hanging 'round so long, it was tempting (I still might do a 'remix' and post it with those lyrics), but I'm gonna log off now and spend some time working on this. I'll keep the suggestions in mind.
What a thought-provoking start...very Chapinesque (Harry, not Mary).
Where does it go next?
