I guess I should tell you right now that I wasn't aiming for anything deep or brilliantly profound. I went for the "light ditty" approach... I'm thinking of adding one closing verse.
- silly putty
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92 Chestnut Road
I know a girl with eyes so bright
I wondered where she went at night.
So, one day I followed her home
She led me right to Chestnut Road.
Chestnut Road – astonished me.
That's where ghosts are said to be.
And of all the houses there
Hers had to be the witches' lair.
CHORUS:
92 Chestnut Road
Haunted—with no doubt.
Demons lurk and spirits moan
92 Chestnut Road.
I clenched my hands and held my breath
Crept up to that house of death
Found a window, peered inside
Sight there left me horrified.
CHORUS
I tried, I tried to understand
Just why she took a bloody hand,
Dropped it in a boiling brew.
Chestnut Road, house 92.
Then she took a wriggling cat
Threw it in that silver vat.
Added eggs and brownish roots
Left me quaking in my boots.
CHORUS
At that, I knew I couldn't stay
At full speed I ran away.
Cackles echoed in my ears
Traumatized for twenty years.
CHORUS
I see it as a little sing-songy thing that kids would sing (one of those "spooky" story-songs). Good rhythm, on the whole.
your line: Chestnut Road – astonished me. was a bit jarring because it seems sort of incomplete (it seems like it needs a "that").
But I don't know...you wanted it to be lighthearted and it is (which is not necessarily a bad thing).
rubber ducky.
Don't cry for me, fettucina.
Hi
It reminded me of something like the headless horseman story. I think you done a good job on it
