You guys all seem to have choruses just pouring out of you this week (in a good way!).
Me? I'm really struggling to just write a chorus without a verse or two to get me going. I have one so far - when I have more I'll post them below here and do some critiques later in the week.
Cheers!
G
Stress Ball (SlowPlay)
You're my stress ball
And I squeeze and I squeeze,
To keep you in your place.
You're my stress ball,
Always willing to please
And always returning to shape.
Listen Louder Than You Play
Man, trying to read everyone's submissions this week is just never going to happen! There's too many of us!!!!!!! (never!)
Well, despite complaining earlier, I've actually ended up with four! The other three are as follows:
Underfoot (rocketgirl)
Hoover when you're tired.
Laugh when you're sad.
Daydream when you're late.
Cry when you're glad.
You say I'd never
But you know I would!
So pleased to meet you,
I'm Mr Underfoot.
Postponing the Inevitable (portia)
You know you can't say no forever.
I've got into you head and I'll never let go.
You'll suffer until you come to me for rest.
Stop postponing the inevitable.
Life Through Post-It Notes (Slowplay)
I believe in life though post-it notes,
I believe in the push after the shove.
I believe I just ripped out your throat.
My Love.
Listen Louder Than You Play
Hey, gjbrake, nice work.
I like the new 3 over the first, but the first could be fun too depending on the music and verses.
My fav is Underfoot. I like where you took it.
I'm also impressed with Post-it Notes, I know I'd never have thought to take it that way. Again, I guess that's why we're doing this assignment.
Ice cream is a dish best served cold.
My favorite is Underfoot, but maybe cause I'm biased :wink:
No seriously I think it's the best out of the four. G.
I had to read that one twice befor i got it! ( yes i'm a bit dense at times :lol: ) Thats kinda sweet :D --the dog
heya
I like "life through post-it notes" best. got a funny little turn in the end.
really good work.
cheers,
bluenightangel
"oh, eventually it will break your heart" - anders wendin
