I would have to say that I'm having a lot of trouble with this assignment, mainly cos it's not the way I like to write songs. I prefer get something that I'm comfortable with and then let it go. I don't really like hacking a song once I've finished with it. So this song isn't by any means finished and I've yet to write the bridge, but I thought Id post it anyway just to stay in the hunt. The song is mainly written to compliment the music, which I've written to let me experiment with my bass. As you can imagine from the title it will be sung in an ethereal way, anyway here it is for what its worth.
Dream
You talk to me in my dream
Dream
I face reality in my dream
Never showing
Never knowing
Never going
Anywhere in my dream
Dream
I thought of you in my dream
Dream
But you were nowhere to be seen
Never showing
Never knowing
Never going
Anywhere in my dream
Dream
You talk to me in my dream
Dream
I face reality in my dream
Never knowing
Always going
Going nowhere in my dream
Dream
I thought of you in my dream
Dream
But you were nowhere to be seen
Never knowing
Always going
Going nowhere in my dream
bridge
But now you've left me for some
One who's taken all of
The things that I held dear
The things that we once shared
And all I'm left is with some
Sense of bitterness and
A taste that's in my mouth
A taste that's in my heart
<acoustic bridge>
Dream
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Dream
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Never knowing
Always going
Going nowhere in my dream
Dream
You talked to me in my dream
Dream
A fading echo of what we've been
Never knowing
You were always going
Going nowhere in my dream
Dream
I thought of you in my dream
Dream
But you were nowhere to be seen
Never knowing
You were always going
Going nowhere in my dream
Now you've left me for some
One who's taken all of
The things that I held dear
The things that we once shared
And all I'm left is with some
Sense of bitterness and
A taste that's in my mouth
A hunger in my heart
<acoustic bridge>
Dream
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Dream
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Never knowing
You were always going
Going nowhere in my dream
version 4
Dream
© Copyright 2006 Paul Brady
Dream
You talked to me in my dream
Dream
A fading echo of what has been
No way of knowing
You were always going
I'm going nowhere in my dream
Dream
I thought of you in my dream
Dream
But you were nowhere to be seen
No way of knowing
You were always going
I'm going nowhere in my dream
Now you've left me for some
One who's taken all of
The things that I held dear
The things that we once shared and
All I'm left is with some
Sense of bitterness and
A taste that's in my mouth
A hunger in my heart
Who would have known it
You never showed it
We're going nowhere in my dream
Dream
You talked to me in my dream
Dream
A fading echo of what has been
No way of knowing
You were always going
I'm going nowhere in my dream
Hi Paul
Very simple lyrics which concidering the ethereal theme you have in mind I reckon will work very nicely . I like how you start with Dream then a little explaination then Dream again { I like that }
Cheers
Have a great Christmas mate
Trevor
Here is to you as good as you are
And here is to me as bad as I am
As good as you are and as bad as I am
I'm as good as you are as bad as I am
Paul,
Nice and simple I like that. I can see a bridge working very well in
this frame work. My thought would be to go for something slightly
more "wordy". Nothing to take away from the simplicity of what
you have, but just a bit of the of why they are apart.
Good Job
John
John I think your right, it would contrast nicely with the simple lines, thanks for that.
cheers
Paul
What if the bridge for this song was some kind of little psychadelic break? I'm imagining of some really sleepy echo-y vocals with a pulsing beat or something. You could sample some of your own vocals harmonize them or something. Wow.. I think maybe I should go to bed.
Hi Dave,
sleepy echo-y vocals with a pulsing beat or something currently the verses are like that so I was thinking the bridge should be more intense, I think a contrast of the 2 would be good, but seing as I havent written it yet Im still open to ideas, thanks for your input, I like your idea of harmonizing the voice.
Paul
I've posted the bridge and changed the choruses a little bit. Its still not complete and Im not entirely happy with it, but Im feeling a bit more confident about it now.
see version 2
Paul
Pbee
I like what you have so far, and the way you're planning on doing it is a great idea.
I am having some problems with the last half of the bridge, maybe I am just nitpicky
right now, but to me it would read better as
And all I'm left with
Is bitterness
A taste that's in my mouth
A burning that's in my heart
Or something like that ??
I just checked on your site and there was no recording yet, hopefully you'll get to it soon :)
Blessings. Olav
Thanks Olav and Peter, I agree with your comments and Ive made some changes, it's still not quite there yet but I think it's getting close
see version 3
cheers
Paul
Paul,
It's nice to be able to watch the process at work. I think this is
coming together nicely and can't wait for the finished product.
John
Looking good to me PBee.....
:D :D :D
Vic
"Sometimes the beauty of music can help us all find strength to deal with all the curves life can throw us." (D. Hodge.)
Pbee
I like it alot the dream at the end mentioned twice I am thinking along the lines reallly dragging it out
drrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeaaaaaaaammm
bit hard to type what I mean ( hope you get my meaning )
Trevor
Here is to you as good as you are
And here is to me as bad as I am
As good as you are and as bad as I am
I'm as good as you are as bad as I am
Trevor, thats exactly how it goes, Im in the process of recording it at the moment so I should be able to post it in the next couple of days.
cheers
Paul
Really looking forward to hearing it Paul, now you are going record it
Trevor
Here is to you as good as you are
And here is to me as bad as I am
As good as you are and as bad as I am
I'm as good as you are as bad as I am
Ive finally finished this song, man that was an effort, see version 4
I play the bass and the guitar on this recording. The hardest part was trying to sync the bass with the guitar, without a drummer to set the timing I didnt find that easy at all. Anyway heres the link:
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/pagemusic.cfm?bandID=328886
cheers
Paul
